Nowadays, more and more people want to live in a big city because they see many advantages. Both of country living and city living are good place to live. But I prefer to live in a city than to live in a country. My view is based on financial and sentimental reasons.
Financially, if you live in the country you will be faced with different advantages and challenges in saving money. Most people think that the best way of saving money is living countryside. But I disagree with this. For instance, when you live in a country, the car is absolutely essential. Big cities often lack sufficient parking or charge high rates for the available parking options. But public transportation options fill this void, making owning a car in a big city unnecessary. Whether traveling by taxi, subway or bus, you can reach our destination in a city for a reasonable price. Thus, you can save your money on gas, parking, insurance...etc.
Sentimentally, There is a big offer how to spend free time. There are a lot of theatre, concerts and other ways of entertainment. There is always a lot to do and visit and lot of possibilities of shopping. Moreover, many social events held in a big city. If you want to make your life eventual, big city is your place to live.
In a summary, besides these 2 points, there are many advantages of city living such as: opportunities, convenience, jobs...etc.
Therefore, i would prefer to live in a city until i retire. Because city is place to young people live.
Ankhbayar, sorry to say that you still need a lot of works regarding to your essay. There are many error sentences, either in grammar or in meaning. However, it is not the weakness that you cannot decrease, I believe that by having a regular writing can help you a lot. Consider that you are lucky to find this website from hundred miles away there. I would like to remind you that perhaps you need to write your topic in a proper way. 'IELTS writing Task 2: (then write your topic)' or perhaps 'TOEFL IBT writing or anything', just make sure that you write your topic as clear as possible. Now, for a breakdown of your grammatical and sentence errors, mind the corrections below:
- Both of country living and city living are good place to live (confusing sentence, examiner or reader is not a mind-reader)
- ButHowever , I prefer to live (in Academic Essay writing, it is not suggested to start a sentence by using coordinating conjunction)
- saving money is living in countryside (I've just realized that your second sentence is confusing because of this (no preposition))
- But I disagree....But public transportation... (coordinating conjunction problem 'again')
- gas, parking, insurance...etc. (avoid to use ETC in your academic essay. It indicates that you are running out of ideas or examples. Some people nowadays called ETC as End of Thinking Capacity)
- There are a lot of theatres
- In a summary,
- there are many advantages of city living such as: opportunities, convenience, jobs...etc. (another ETC problem)
There you are Ankhbayar. I hope you find my feedback is helpful for enhancing your writing skill. :)
Hi Hannah, I hope to add additional insights to your essay,
What is very noticeable in this essay is that, you have the idea of what to write, however, you can't seem to figure out how to express yourself, it's as if I was reading an essay written in a manner of "for the sake of", and this should not be the case, every essay practice should be written with much caution, in such a way that each and every essay will be a good written essay.
Now, I understand how hard it is when you don't speak the language, this is why practice is very crucial, practice is the only way we get better if not the best.
Definitely, there is a lot of work to be done in your essay and I hope you follow through with the suggestions given here on EF, from my end however, I suggest you use simple words that depicts your essay, when it is big words that you aim, as it is here, make sure that is followed with a well rounded explanation in order for you not to get tangled in the idea.
I hope to review your revision soon and push yourself to practicing the English language, you are off to a good start and keep it up.
