Competition sports,both team and individual have no place in student's curriculum?

Nowadays, in order to expanding education, necessity to physical activities is the most prominent stuffs. Sport and competition might be in school curriculum for developing pupils' creativity and responsibility.

Although, sport gives pupils' energy and time,it helps them to grow their creativity and let them to examinate their burden.In a school competition, all competitor do their tasks and they will be known their feature responsibility in the society,even if, it may be had some costs for them such as casualties, stay away from courses and so on.

on the other hand,sport and competition grow up students' sprite and help them for learning,also,make them healthy and expert says :healthy mind in healthy body. Body activity will increase heartbeat,besides,team working has pulse effects on students by playing their role rightly.

Defiantly, paying attention only to study makes students only single side so up brings only theoretical students. Sports and other activities like scientific picnic will grow up them to pragmatic person, furthermore, sick and fat students could not be learnt as well as strong and slim students.

As a result,it is important to paying attention to sport as a useful activity in school since society needs slim and expert person to grow up

..For developing creativity and responsibility, sport and competition are very important.

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Nowadays, schools place a higher priority for physical activities of their students in order to achieve a healthy balance between their academic and social growth.

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