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ESSAY TOPIC :We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in businesses, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used for in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we he more auspicious of their benefits?
Human beings are becoming more influenced by computer technologies: desktops, laptops, tablets, smart phones etc. Few years ago, if you wanted to surf the internet or to play computer games, you had to visit local cyber café and pay for particular time. Nowadays, there is more than one computer in each house. Actually, in our homes desktop computers are being replaced by portable devices. Our laptops travel with us by plane and by train. It's hard to imagine what you would do if you forgot your computer going on a business trip. You run a risk of getting fired.
On the one hand, in the future computers will be used to replace humans in all the spheres of life. The predictions are quite troublesome. Nowadays, many individuals lose their jobs due to the fact that computers take their place. Hopefully, we don't trust computers enough to rely on them totally and give them the power with our every day life.
On the other hand, there are some situations where we can't stop them completely, for example, when travelling by plane equipped with automatic pilot system. There is certain inevitability that technology will progress and become increasingly complex. Today we become addicted too much to computer technologies; this is the reason why, one day, will discover ourselves controlled by them.
It's never late to mend the situations by being extremely vigilant trying to prevent this turn of events. However, if it happens, we must remain the dominant part of the computer system.
ESSAY TOPIC :We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in businesses, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used for in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we he more auspicious of their benefits?
Human beings are becoming more influenced by computer technologies: desktops, laptops, tablets, smart phones etc. Few years ago, if you wanted to surf the internet or to play computer games, you had to visit local cyber café and pay for particular time. Nowadays, there is more than one computer in each house. Actually, in our homes desktop computers are being replaced by portable devices. Our laptops travel with us by plane and by train. It's hard to imagine what you would do if you forgot your computer going on a business trip. You run a risk of getting fired.
On the one hand, in the future computers will be used to replace humans in all the spheres of life. The predictions are quite troublesome. Nowadays, many individuals lose their jobs due to the fact that computers take their place. Hopefully, we don't trust computers enough to rely on them totally and give them the power with our every day life.
On the other hand, there are some situations where we can't stop them completely, for example, when travelling by plane equipped with automatic pilot system. There is certain inevitability that technology will progress and become increasingly complex. Today we become addicted too much to computer technologies; this is the reason why, one day, will discover ourselves controlled by them.
It's never late to mend the situations by being extremely vigilant trying to prevent this turn of events. However, if it happens, we must remain the dominant part of the computer system.
