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The connubial couple have twice more chances for happiness than single people



yurikeyuri 43 / 49  
Dec 1, 2016   #1
The charts illustrate about the percentage of happiness ratings based on the number of people age and the percentage of the effect of the children who the marital couple has on the spouse life. Overall, the connubial people have twice more happiness rating than unmarried people, and also the children who married people have that is not effect in the happiness ratings.

Firstly, the percentage of happiness of married people is above 40 percent which the highest percentage at 45 percent in young age, between 18 and 29 years old, and also the lowest percentage in over medium, 50 to 64 years old. Secondly. The percentage of happiness of unmarried people is between 20 and 35 percent which the highest percentage at 34 percent in the old period, 65 years and over.

Another graph shows the happiness of marital couple who have children that above 40 percent and it is not effect to their happiness. The highest percentage at 44 percent in married couple life which have children under 18 years old and the lowest percentage in the spouse life which have only children 18+ years old about 41 percent.

Pramudia27 34 / 52  
Dec 1, 2016   #2
hellooo yuuriiiii

yuri, i think that you should attach your figure owing to the fact that other people do not know about data that you mean

The charts illustrate ...

you mention percentage twice. i think you do not need to do it.
... the percentage of happiness ratings based on the number of peoplethe age and the percentage of the effect of thefor children who the marital ...

... at 45 percent in young age, between 18 and 29 years old [in ielts writing task 1, you do not to go detail) , and also (...) over medium, 50 to 64 years old .


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