athletics events
This refers to local and small sports events. An additional descriptor is required to meet the "international" reference. Words along the lines of global, universal, or intercontinental come to mind. Adding any of these words before "athletic events" would have allowed you to create a very accurate paraphrasing of the reference from the original presentation. The lack of it makes your rewording inaccurate.
the author's opinion is reached.
2 things wrong with this reference. First, you are the author so you do not need to say "author's opinion". Take charge of the essay and use personal first person pronouns since that is stated in the writing instruction. Second, you should be indicating your opinion as a part of your opinion statement. That opinion statement is missing from this presentation so you will not receive a score for that aspect of consideration.
Both these problems already indicate a weakly presented essay discussion foundation. It will affect the overall score. A review of the essay shows that your personal opinion was only presented in the concluding summary. Meaning you did not truly meet the scoring requirements in terms of presentation and format. The personal opinion needs to have a stand alone explanation. There also needs to be a proper reference to third person opinion / pronouns throughout to clarify that you are presenting a public opinion explanation and not your own in the relevant paragraphs. Basically, you have not met the requirements for a passing essay since this is an under developed and little explained presentation that does not contain a proper concluding summary.