Task 2 - Ielts Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges

problems in india

Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well.
What problems will your country face in the next ten years?
How can these problems be overcome?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There is not doubt that the nations are facing new problems every year. This essay will outline some of issues that the country India might be facing in upcoming decade and propose some measures to mitigate them.

Firstly, although India geographically enjoys a big landmass but with that it is also second highest populated country. This has resulted in number of critical problems that it will be facing in next decade, such as rise in environmental pollution, and limited availability of educational infrastructure. With regards to the former, it can be attributed to the rising transport on roads. therefore, more pollution generated every minute. As for limited educational infrastructure, the rising population will result in more children at home, which will lead to growth in students at educational institutions. Since the educational infrastructure is not growing at the same pace as the population, the time will come when getting admission to school will be highly competitive.

However, a number of steps can be taken in order to mitigate aforementioned issues, not least among them is switching to electronic vehicles. This switch would certainly help in limiting pollution as damage done by electric vehicles on road to environment is almost fraction of conventional vehicles. Furthermore, it is important to implement birth-control so as to curtail the growth of population. Which will indirectly keep educational infrastructure from being overcrowded. Consequently, these mentioned issues would be contained.

All things considered, Despite the enviromental. and over-exploitation of educational infrastructure problems that country India might face in upcoming decade, I believe implementing measure like motivating use of electric vehicles and educating birth control can help mitigate them to good extent.

I would say your writing lacks coherence and cohesion. I believe it has some problems with the logical flow. Also, I find your conclusion somewhat unreadable and unnecessarily long.

@hyperephania

For instance?

For clarity in your discussion and a complete response to the prompt questions, you should present your discussion response topics in the later part of the paragraph. That is usually presented after the topic restatement. This helps to show the clarity of your understanding of the discussion requirements and the related responses that you will be highlighting in your discussion. Don't give a general non-statement response. It will not help to increase your TA score.

Your first reasoning paragraph has a redundancy. It repeats the prompt statement for no reason. The first sentence of the reasoning paragraphs should always represent the discussion topic. Introduce the topic and proceed to an immediate discussion in the next sentence. There is no need to constantly repeat what the discussion topic is about. Since that is not related to the actual discussion, the examiner could decide to deduct that irrelevant word count from your total count, which could result in your essay falling under the word minimum, allowing for scoring percentage deductions to be performed on your overall score.

Your solutions paragraph should follow the format of the previous paragraph. That means, you have to discuss it in the same order of presentation for C&C considerations. You have to present the population solution, then pollution, and so on. I have to point out though, that simply mentioning the topics, without an actual expanded explanation will result in your paragraphs being considered as under developed due to a lack of supporting explanations and examples. This will mean an overall low score for your essay.

u should use "no doubt" instead of "not doubt"