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Are countries with a long average working time more economically successful?



TiffanyLee 1 / -  
Jul 17, 2015   #1
Many people wrongly believe that a long average working time is directly tied to a nation's economic prosperity. From my perspective, overtime work is more likely to negatively impact on economic progress. In fact, several important factors which contribute to economic success have already shrunk working hours considerably.

Lengthening the duration of hours per employee is not necessarily improve the productivity rate of labour. Substantial scientific evidence demonstrated that extended work schedules adversely affect the health and well-being of workers. People work long hours are vulnerable to illness, including fatigue, work stress and depression, thus, decline their performance. Accordingly, the rate of sick leave is likely to increase, in a long run, which is regarded as a cost which would hold back the economic success. Hence, a long average working time is associated with diminished output.

Instead of increasing working hours, some essential factors of driving a successful economy have incredibly improved productivity along with reducing working hours of employees. Firstly, technological innovation, which proves a nation's ability to create and exploit knowledge, has become a major source of competitive advantage and wealth creation. The innovative technology, such as computer and smartphone, have helped to increase performance in producing goods, facilitated communication and enabled more extensive networking and cooperation among firms. Apart from that, highly educated and well-trained workers are vitally important to improve the productivity by competently operating industries.

In conclusion, a long average working time of a country is not proportional to its economic success.

lcturn87 - / 423  
Jul 17, 2015   #2
Hello, I can help to assist you with corrections to your paper. In the first paragraph, you should delete "on" before economic. The last sentence in the paragraph is confusing. Do you mean that when people reduce their workload, it leads to economic success?

In the second paragraph, I think you can state "work hours", delete "necessarily", and change improve to "improving". I will show you how to improve this sentence: People working long hours are vulnerable to illness, including fatigue, work stress and depression; thus, their performance declines. (If you want to combine two sentences, use a semicolon instead of a comma after depression.) If you have researched this information, remember to give credit to your source in this paragraph.

In the third paragraph, I think you should change the end of the first sentence to: "are improving productivity, along with reducing working hours of employees." When I read this sentence, it seemed as if this was a continuous action so the verb improved needed to be changed to improving. In the last sentence of the paragraph, you can delete "the" and I think you should change industries to "technology".

I think you should add a few more sentences to summarize your findings in your conclusion. Good Job!
justivy03 - / 2265  
Jul 19, 2015   #3
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- have helped to increase performance in producing goods,

Tiffany, I definitely agree that longer hours does not necessarily factor in the success in one's economic boom, the manpower should be effective and efficient, this is what drives the nation's economy.

I hope my remarks help a little bit.
Michele9 5 / 9  
Jul 20, 2015   #4
Lengthening the duration of hours per employee is not necessarily improveing the productivity rate of labour.

People who work long hours are vulnerable to illness.
surely you can avoid "who" but if you put it you'll make you sentence more formal

you already received good feedbacks, I wish I helped you a bit


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