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Crime news should not be reported in newspapers or tv



Saidakhror 6 / 21  
May 30, 2012   #1
These days, the amount of crime news broadcasted has taken enormous scales so that every single individual got full insight into the factual act of events within their precise chronological record. Some people, in response to this trend, hold that it has an intimidating effect on people's well being as a part of integral community while in many case it goads people into crime committing and therefore the news which show the scenes of crimes should be excluded from traditional program of mass media sources.

To begin with, the broad range of media programs that show crime has a deterrent effect on community as they depict a chain of events whether small scale crimes or series of felonies which impose certain atmosphere of agitation as well as target people's attitude toward the situation that is happening in the community in the negative way. People start feeling themselves insecure when it comes to social stability which they speculate to be the government agenda to ensure but which may be undermined by the numerous crimes sometimes happening regardless of government's authority or political economical situation. As a result, vote of confidence to the government could be lost leading to desperation and chaos in the governmental bodies that are responsible for that security and the people who feel disadvantaged because of their government incapability to perform actions against these maladies.

Also, these daily recurring phenomena beget serious behavior deviations, especially in highly flexible young people with unmolded personalities who endeavor to imitate villainies considering them to be the personages whom the society much talks about, unintentionally making them to be the fake superstars whom these young people desire to look like. It became a common practice, unfortunately, that young people try to pursue the actions that delinquent perform only because the last has achieved notorious fame and his or her doings, frequently enormously exaggerated, are being many times shown by prejudiced TV channels that are concerned only with their rating. All these factors give young people the example of how the crime can be committed but their inability to evaluate the consequences and the lack of functionality of the decision-making process lead to their unconscious crime committing which however has real aftermaths that in practice turn out to be the life-long regrets.

Finally, to avoid this trend I would agree to certain extent that the amount of crime news shown is to be significantly diminished or some state-led programs to be organized which would have a full control on what and how much is broadcasted and which audience is targeted by the crime news.

btxdzsz 3 / 5  
May 30, 2012   #2
To be honesty, I am little confused about the long sentense the writer wrote...
OP Saidakhror 6 / 21  
May 30, 2012   #3
Elena, even if i disagree with the majority of correction that you made, still i have got some ideas, so I appreciate your help.About the sentence length i may say that it is how the sentences are to be built if you want to bring your writing up to the highest standards
Elena_lovSL - / 5  
May 30, 2012   #4
Dear S-boy!!
Well, I'm positive that each and every one of my corrections is undoubtedly correct. That's why I'm a CONTRIBUTOR and You are NOT !! :P

If you think you're still correct, scroll up and read Zhang's comment. That's rite, he's confused.
Again, to bring out the highest standards in writing you don't need to make it a mile wrong. Read a book by any famous Author and then your self made hypothesis "Long sentences = awesome" will reach oblivion.

Your sentences are like humongous dude and I speak for each and every one of them. Even if you use language or words of the highest degree, if they are vague and Long they do not make much sense and in short the reader gets bored.

So, Yeah I stand by to what I said. One More thing, your statement should have been " Eventhough I disagree with majority of the corrections.... " :P

Not intending to reply agn!!
Ciao
OP Saidakhror 6 / 21  
May 30, 2012   #5
I am not asking to..CONTRIBUTOR , come back when you will raise your English level, I will be waiting for you, and please don't make me scoff again at your posts, the way you envy makes me to move to the pity, I will give you a head start to feel superior if you want too
ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 661  
May 30, 2012   #6
Hi,

Hey guys, what's wrong with you. We are here to help each other, not to show who is better. I think we must be criticizable. Elena you should also consider that contributors are not expert and the title of "contributor" must not make you proud. Mr/Ms Saidakhror you must be more polite toward a person who tried to help you.

We should learn respect others' opinions

Regards
Ahmad
OP Saidakhror 6 / 21  
May 30, 2012   #7
Ahmad, i really appreciate your words and you are 100 percent right. But someone who has got so called status of contributor thinks that it is hard to do that, and hints that people within this status have a certain privilege, she does not possess even half of knowledge that I do, and therefore, expresses defense reaction toward the person who is much smarter than she is, it is just natural selection, I think


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