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Crimes in Newport city between 2003 and 2012. The burglary had the highest number among incidents.


Beauty17 56 / 88 5  
Aug 30, 2016   #1
The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newportcity centre from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reportingthe main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

A comparison of number of crime in Newport city centre is provided in this line charts between 2003 and 2012. It is noticeable that burglary is the highest number of incident. While number of robbery (theft from the person) is stable, burglary and car theft are plummeted.

A number of burglary and car theft reach the peak of it in 2004. Burglary was fallen down for four years subsequently from 2005 to 2008 and car theft was decline for a year since 2005 and stable onwards. Burglary becomes steadily between 2009 and 2012. In 2009 and 2011 burglary has a same number while car theft has same number in 2007 and 2009. The peak of car theft was in 2004.

Robbery is the lowest number of crime. Highest number of robbery was in 2005 whereas the lowest was in 2008. The number of robbery felony was decrease since 2006 until 2008. Robbery crime did not show any significant change annually.

akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Aug 30, 2016   #2
Hi Mehreza.
Please, keep in your mind that when you upload your writing here, please you attach the picture to get accurate feedback.
Let me help you to finalize this grammatically.


A comparison of THE number AMOUNT of crime in Newport city (...) between 2003 and 2012 BASED ON THREE SEPARATED AREAS. OVERALL, It is noticeable that burglary ...
MOREOVER, WHILE THE number of robberies (theft from the person) is A stable TREND, burglary and car theft are HAD plummeted.

A THE number of BOTH burglary and car theft ...
THE FIGURE OF Burglary was EXPERIENCED A DRAMATIC FALL fallen down for four years subsequently from 2005 to 2008. MEANWHILE, and THE LEVEL OF car theft was declineD for a year since FROM 2005 and stable onwards TO THE LAST PERIOD. THE RATE OF Burglary becomes steadily between 2009 and 2012. In 2009 and 2011, burglary THE FORMER has HAD a THE same number POSITION while car theft THE LATTER has HAD THE same number PROPORTION in 2007 and 2009. The peak of car theft THE LATTER was in 2004.

Robbery is SUCCESSFULLY COMMANDED the lowest number PERCENTAGE of crime. THE Highest number of robbery was ...
The number of robbery felony was decreaseD since FROM 2006 until TO 2008.

Note: Please, you review about the language of change. there were looks that you are so confused to determine "NOUN or "VERB".

Burglary was fallen down for four years subsequently

The number of robbery felony was decrease since 2006 until 2008

I believe you will be the competence for this on condition that you wanna provide time to practice more and more.
Permata992 7 / 12  
Aug 30, 2016   #3
Hallo mei mei.. i left comment here.. i hope that it will be useful to improve your writing skill. Mr. Akbar give you many correction for your writing. So, i will just you some suggest to write a good writing.

- Meireza is better to you to write in 3 paragraphs. The first is introduction(you can paraphrase the question), next is trend (you can put the conclusion in this graph) and the last but not least is body. Remember, dont put your opiniom just read based on the data. Fighting mei mei and stay practice becausd practice make perfect.
tyar32 10 / 14  
Aug 30, 2016   #4
Hi
I have some suggestions for you. I hope it will help you to develop your writing skill.

there is no chart
A number of burglary and car theft reach the peak of it in 2004 ---> In 2004, Bulgary and car theft hit the highest number
between 2009 and 2012 ----> too much use between...and....., you can use another language of time
Robbery is the lowest number of crime ---->[/b]when this happen?[/b]
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,198 464  
Aug 30, 2016   #5
Beauty17, you have to include the picture of the graph every time you post your report writing here. This helps readers understand more what is being asked in the graph. Without any graph, I cannot even share how good you deal with the task response and cohesion & coherence. Therefore, I only focus on the technical details of such a report. Here we are;

number of crime

number of incident.

The/ A number of is always followed by plural noun

While number of robbery (theft from the person) is stable

No significant changes in the number of robberies.

burglary and car theft

The rate of burglary and car theft

A number of burglary and car theft reach the peak of it in 2004.

It seems that you still have problems with tense usage. 2004 corresponds with past tense, not the present one. Write :"reached" instead of "reach"

Reading sample answer as many as you can helps you improve your vocabulary, grammar and ideas related to IELTS report. Hope this helps :D


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