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Many criminals commit crimes after they are set free. Opinion and solutions.



bdmqnh 7 / 16  
Aug 12, 2020   #1

Essay about recidivism



Report research suggests that the majority of criminals who were sent to prison would commit crimes when they are set free. What do you think of this case? What to be done to solve this problem?

It is suggested that ex-criminals are likely to reoffend after they are released. Personally, though I think this is a negative case, I believe there are several solutions to this issue.

On the hand, there are two factors that I suppose would detrimentally affect both criminals and the public. In terms of offenders, as they continue to commit crimes, they would be more severely punished. These punishments may include years of being put behind bars, or even death sentence. This means to put an end to their lives. As for society, when these people disobey the law, they may cause serious injuries to not only properties but also humans. For example, some people often have their devices stolen, in which they store secret and important files, or there are those who get killed only because of hooliganism in the pub.

On the other hand, some effective solutions can be implemented to reduce this. Firstly, instead of imposing harsh punishments on law breakers, which is only a temporary solution, the government should teach them rights from wrongs. As a result, they can themselves change their mindset and rehabilitate, which is considered a far more permanent method. Secondly, people and the government should be more open to ex-offenders. This is because if those set free find everyone discriminate against them, they are more likely to be back to their previous path. For instance, the government can encourage companies to provide more chances for after-prison people to find jobs. Thus, they are less likely to feel dispensable and can contribute more values to the public.

To sum up, it is my belief that returning to the criminal path after being released is fairly a negative case. Regardless of it, there are two ways suggested above to alleviate this problem.

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tendo - / 1  
Aug 12, 2020   #2
In the beginnign when you put [personally, though], "though" seems to be an uneccesary filler word so I'd take it out.
As for the second paragraph, I'm pretty sure you mean "one the ONE hand, there are two factors that would detrimentally..." The "that I suppose" is unnecessary and it doesn't sound as good because it's just filler words. You want to make it sound strong so try not to include unecessary filler words. "This means to put an end to their lives." People already know this because that's what a death sentence is. You don't have to specify what it is because it's in the word itself. " For example, some people often have their devices stolen." It'd be nice if there were statistics to backup what you're saying because it can only make your paragraph stronger.

I think overall you need to cut down on the filler words and try to use less transition words. If you want to make your argument strong, you have to back it up with statistics and clear research.


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