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Cultural Changes in Music from Generation to Generation


Tarcisiofl 1 / -  
Apr 22, 2014   #1
Generation consists by a group of people born in the same time, who experienced the same social events and shared the same historical experience, which influence the person's behaviors. Therefore, it means that in all societies are gaps between generations are observed in different relations form, requiring all continuous exercise to deal with differences. In fact, the generations come and go, and each have different genres and styles of music that differentiate them from the previous generations. However, nothing separates the generations more than music. The difference in music makes a barrier separating the generations. Currently generation and previous generation differs in several ways because of genres and styles of music.

I need to transform this part in bold to make like a purpose hook for one essay, can you help me?
niesaysi 16 / 284 83  
Apr 23, 2014   #2
First and foremost, include the FULL prompt for us to know what the essay is all about. With that, we can help you answer all your concerns :)
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Apr 29, 2014   #3
Yes, this is very important. You need to tell us the purpose why you wrote it (IELTS, TOEFL, GRE etc.) and then what the full prompt is. Then only we can align our comments with task requirements.

Therefore, it means that in all societies are gaps between generations are observed in different relations form, requiring all continuous exercise to deal with differences.

.... this needs grammar fixes;
Therefore, it means that in all societies there exists gaps between generations that require continuous efforts to deal with these differences.
In writing, clarity is much more important than complexity. :D


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