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Some personal data about me, my family and plans for the future - Introducing myself



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Apr 6, 2015   #1
My full name is Daly Den. I come from Vietnam. I was born and grew up in a peaceful countryside in the central of Vietnam. When I was thirteen I moved to an active city, which is Ho Chi Minh City, until now.

Twenty years ago, I was twenty I have dream in the future I would go abroad to study and now that dream come true.
I got married twelve years ago.
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justivy03 - / 2265  
Apr 8, 2015   #2
Hi Daly,

Just to share with you, for a Vietnamese, your English is pretty good, practice will make it even better, I love the fact that you listen to English music to push and learn more. I would also like to add that signing up for English classes or simply talking to people who speaks english will really help a lot. Now, find the corrections below;

My full name is Daly Den. I'M from Vietnam. I was born and grew up in a peaceful countryside in the central of Vietnam. When I was thirteen I moved to an active city, which is Ho Chi Minh City.

Twenty years ago, I DREAMT THAT in the future I would go abroad to study and now that dream CAME true.
I got married twelve years ago. About my family, I have two children both of them are boys. The eldest son is ten years old, HE'S IN FOURTH GRADE and another son is four years old, he is in the KINDERGARTEN. So when I go far from my family I MISS them very much and they also MISS me.

I work as a dean of Information Technology IN THE faculty at NNT College. It belongs to BBN.
My husband and I have the same major AND we met each other when we were IN the same class at THE university. Now we have the same jobs and the same position but different universities.

When I have free time I always play badminton with my friends and listen to English music because I want to improve my English skills.

Before I become a PhD student in this university. I have two years OF study IN my country but I WAS UNLUCKY AS my supervisor DIED after two years OF WORKING together. After that, I felt very disappointed to MOVE ON. ONE day, I HAD a chance to go to abroad to study so now I become a PhD student in this university.
OP Seven_Daly 1 / 1  
Apr 10, 2015   #3
Thank you for your correct the mistakes for me. I will try my best in the future. Do you the online class help me to improve the gramma and vocabulary skills.


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