Describe a dream country where wish visit many times

Visiting Japan

If I have an opportunity I want to live in Japan. This country has many wonderful things that surprised me. Firstly, the quality of the food is very tasty. I used to eat an apple in Japan and I could not forget. Secondly, Japan had mountain scenery, I spent a long day taking many photos. Every place was beautiful. Finally, the culture in Japan is very special, have a unique point of view, for example, Japanese is patient, they can stand in line for about an hour to get the ticket but they do not feel uncomfortable about that. Moreover, when they eat, I am aware of their lips moving no sound. They are very polite and be afraid to bother others or make trouble. As a result, they will bring more burden and pain of life. I can spend a long day talking about Japan. I wish I can visit again.

The instruction asks the writer to talk about a country that he would like to visit repeatedly. That is totally the opposite of what the statement contains. The work is in error as it discusses a country where the author wants to live. That incorrect representation totally changes the information focus.

Grammatical errors in relation to sentence formatting are also present. There seems to be a confusion as to when the writer should use "is or "are". He must review the verb usage rules for the aforementioned words. He should also review the rules for past and present tense usage. More importantly, he must avoid hanging sentence presentations in the statement. Not all of his sentences have clear subject- verb agreements either.

@Alice1410
I think it's a little bit short for a part 2 IELTS, right ?
You should say more about when was the first time you go there ^^