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The development of media technology such as TV and internet has affected citizen's activities


fardan10 18 / 25 1  
Apr 6, 2016   #1
It is more and more difficult to escape the the influence of the media on our lives. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in a media-rich society.

Media is of pivotal role for human's lives to communicate each others. As such, the development of media technology such as television and internet has affected to citizen's activities commonly identified there are both benefits and drawbacks in global society. In this essay will discuss both views.

It is inevitable that the use of media technology especially internet can render some benefits for inhabitants. For last a decade, there is large number of people utilise internet to support their communication. It could possibly text a message electronically by email appication to other netizens entire the world. In Addition, enourmous sorts of information can be accessed massively in order to up-date the recent news in society. Therefore, it is essential for people to use the media for supporting their needs.

Nevertheless, people also have to be worried about several dire effects which can be possibly resulted by the media. There are so many various of television contents or video games in internet might be inapropriate for human behaviour, in particular for children. It shows that several programs involving violence in their contents. A 2010 review by psychologist Craig A. Anderson and others revealed that the evidence strongly suggests that exposure to violent video games and television programs is a causal risk factor for increased aggressive behavior, aggressive cognition, and aggressive affect and for decreased empathy and prosocial behavior. Therefore, this can result to harmful impact for human beings.

In conclusion, Although many kinds of advantages can be taken by society from media, it is essential to note that it can potentially lead people to negative effect. I would argue that human have to utilise the media wisely in order to prevent the aforemnetoned impacts.

angga93 42 / 74 20  
Apr 7, 2016   #2
Hy Fardan! I have a suggestion to improve your introduction. You can try to mention the essence of your main ideas in your overview instead of mentioning "discuss both views". It will make your introduction stronger and more interesting. I guess Mr. Victor has reviewed your gramatical and structural errors in your sentence. Thus, I will write an alternative introduction based on your ideas, for your consideration.

Media is of pivotal role for human's lives to communicate ...

Media are pivotal for communication. Nowadays, many types of media adapt cutting-edge communication technology which result in wider range of accessible information for people around the world. Although it is true that development of media is beneficial, I firmly believe that it brings more drawbacks for social life.


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