IELTS TASK 1: The diagram shows the process of chocolate production. Summarize the information.

THE PROCESS OF PRODUCING CHOCOLATE

The diagram shows how chocolate is produced. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The flowchart demonstrates the process of making liquid chocolate.

Looking at the graph, it can be seen that there are ten stages involve in the process, starting with the collection of cacao pods and finishing with liquid chocolate being made.

First, cacao trees are grown in S.America, Africa and Indonesia which bear the ripe cacao pods. After being harversted, the white cacao beans are collected inside the ripe cacao pods. Next, the beans then get fermented before being spread out and left in the sun to dry.

Then all the beans will be put in large packs to transports to the manufacturers by train or lorry. At the factory, the beans are roasted in high temperature at about 350 degrees. The roasted beans continue to be crushed to remove the outer shells from the inner part. Finally, liquid chocolate are made by pressing the inner part of the roasted beans. The procedure is completed

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This is not a flowchart. A flowchart is defined as; a graphic representation, using symbols interconnected with lines, of the successive steps in a procedure or system. The word cannot be used interchangeably with diagram. A more appropriate alternate ward would have been a descriptive chart or outline. These are actual synonyms for a diagram. Be careful with word choices. One incorrect choice can alter the focus of the discussion and cause a failing paragraph score.

There are not enough information within the diagram to warrant a 4 paragraph set-up. This is only a 3 paragraph design. The summary and overview should have been blended into one paragraph. Single sentence presentations are not acceptable as paragraph presentations. It will not geta helpful score.

It is not advisable to say


because the assumption is that the report is detailed enough to be understood without needing to look directly at the image. Always frame these as factual descriptive reports. Do not refer the reader to the image for any reason.


Good information, bad sentence structure. What was the problem? There was no need to start with "first" because the topic sentence did not need it. There was no point in using that format since there was no second or third reference. Use a uniform ordinal next time.

This essay's overall word count is insufficient to appropriately reflect the writer's reporting abilities. You can refer to other essays on the same topic to improve your writing skills. @Holt