The diagrams illustrate the renovation works which have been made on a small island for tourism

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities

The diagrams illustrate the renovation works which have been made on a small island for tourism.
It is clear that the island have witnessed some significant change in erection. There have been an abundance of facilities added for tourists such as accommodations and a restaurant.

Originally, the island was undeveloped. There were some trees located on the island while the rest was only an open space. Subsequently, two separated accommodation areas were constructed for travelers to stay. The reception was positioned in the middle, making it easy to access to the other places from here. Besides, the restaurant was also erected to serve the tourists' need.

Moreover, a simple traffic system was added to the island for commuting, with 2 types of road: footpath and vehicle track. Swimming and boating could be the recreational activities for the tourists because of the constructed pier and the beach. Although, the island was filled by many new constructions, no trees were cut down.

This is a IETLS writing task 1, I need some feedbacks about it to know my band score. Thankyou!

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Take your cue from the original explanation that was provided to you as a reference. The first description indicated 2 maps, note the number of maps provided. Indicate the same in your presentation to remove the guesswork from your presentation. The reader needs to be completely informed within the summary explanation, which includes the number of images provided.


There are a few grammar errors in this presentation. Have should have used the past reference of the word (had). Also, "erection" is singular in form, there are several new edifices erected on the island so the plural form (erections) should have been used.


Two seperate, not seperated. Seperated means that a division was created in the original structure. Since these were built seperately, nothing was divided.

Going through the overall essay, the main problem the student has with the presentation relates to proper word usage and grammar presentation. There is a lack of control over the sentence structures as evidenced by these early, but notable errors. The essay will recieve high deductions specifically in the LR and GRA sections.

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