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The dilemma of whether better opt to reside in apartments or tip in favor of living in houses



kwason 1 / 1  
May 28, 2020   #1
Some people prefer to live in a house, while others think that there are more advantages living in an apartment.

Do the drawbacks of living in a house outweigh the benefits?



It is unequivocal that nowadays, various people have been facing the dilemma of whether they should opt to reside in apartments or tip in favor of living in houses. While the benefits of staying in houses are valid to a certain extent, I am firmly of the opinion that the drawbacks are greater.

On the one hand, there are a host of underlying rationales why dwelling in separate houses could be highly beneficial. One of the key advantages is that owners could have their own personal privacy. For instance, they can renovate the architectural design of their houses, decorate their own preferential styles, enjoy full freedom and their own hobbies, which do not create any disturbances to their neighbors. As a result, these individualized spaces would be somewhat convenient for them, enable them to be truly freshened up. Another significant benefit is that it is far much safer to live in landed houses. Being notorious for devastating tsunamis, Japan profoundly exemplifies this situation. Due to the fact that houses are connected directly with the efficient physical transport system, it is less in peril for Japanese detached houses' owners who can escape from their house with ease than those who reside in high-rise buildings.

On the other hand, I would argue that the advantages of living in a separate house pale in comparison with the disadvantages. Firstly, in spite of the aforementioned safety, these landed houses are alarmingly unsecured. Even though several privileged houses could be well-equipped with private-owned surveillance cameras, this so-called security system is not actually adequate because of the lack of trained security guards available surrounding houses, which could breed burglary, conflagration, and other serious issues. Compared to apartmental conditions, not only do the condominium complexes have professional security officers but each household is also given anti-theft key cards, which is more secured for dwellers. The second drawback that should be taken into consideration is that it takes more time for the house owners to do the cleaning. This is in terms of the fact that a house is more commodious than an apartment. Busy people who find it impossible to spend much time doing the housework would realize that independent houses are not their most ultimate selection when an apartment requires less time to tidy up.

In conclusion, despite several evident benefits that living in a house has, it seems to me that they are dwarfed in comparison with the potential problems.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15385  
May 29, 2020   #2
Your essay does not flow naturally. The word "unequivocal" does not fit the statement you wrote. It sounds like you are trying to impress examiner rather than trying to make a coherent sentence. Do not set out to impress, you can actually score highly if you focus on your natural English vocabulary range and create an understandable sentence each time. The vocabulary score will not be higher if you misuse the word in the sentence. Rather than saying "unequivocal", you could have used the simpler term "clear" to represent the clarity of the current discussion in reference to the choices the people have to make.

The approach to the essay is to prove that your point, that living in a house has more drawbacks than living in an apartment. This is not a compare and contrast essay. This is a single opinion essay that requires you to discuss 2 specific reasons that can support your point of view. In this essay, your discussion should have had 2 paragraphs in reference to the following supporting reasons:

- Security requirements
- Upkeep expenses for an apartment are lesser than that of a house

You should not be focused on the length of the essay. You should be concentrating on making sure that you properly respond to the question. Even if you wrote a long essay, when your response does not follow the expected format, you will lose points in the end. In this case, you will lose word count considerations and lose a percentage of the actual TA score, because you will only be scored for the parts of the essay that apply to your actual response to the question. The rest of the discussion, the first reasoning paragraph will not be considered as a part of the full response since it does not support your discussion point.

BTW, the prompt restatement at the beginning and in the conclusion need to have the 3 sentence requirement for its presentation. You have to make sure that you paraphrase the discussion twice. Once at the beginning, focusing on the supplied information, and at the end, focusing on the discussion you provided.


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