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DISCUSS ABOUT PLAYING VIDEO GAMES.



Sarah Phan 1 / -  
Apr 4, 2018   #1

the video games - are they harmful or useful?



The issue of whether playing electronic and computer games brings positive or negative effects on young people remains a matter for debate. Several people believe that gamers can gain practical skills through playing these games. Others argue that it is a time-consuming activity.

On the one hand, video games have many benefits in education. Firstly, players are provided plenty of opportunities to significantly develop their soft skills from logical thinking to solving problems. Moreover, there are battle games that demand people enhance their ability to do team-work. Therefore, through playing these games, young people may realize the importance of cooperation so as to accomplish the challenges. Finally, the level of games is a strong motivation for players making best efforts to attain high positions.

On the other hand, we find it difficult to deny that young people are squandering time on participate in electronic games. As a evidence of losing hour after hour each day to gaze at computer srceens, players do not spend enough time on main tasks such as household chores and school assignments. On top of that, some games are focused on designing the game narrative rather than training skills, so gamers learn no helpful experiences. This example makes it clear why many people support this stance.

In conclusion, computer games become one of the most popular activities in young people's life. It is true that their drawback are waste of time, but they allows teenegers to thrive a lot of crucial skills for their learning and real life. I believe that they are harmful or useful depending on the way people use them.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15344  
Apr 9, 2018   #2
Sarah, it is difficult for me to review your work because you failed to provide me with the original prompt instructions for this essay. Even though you gave me the title of the topic, you did not properly paraphrase the opening paragraph with the inclusion of a discussion instruction which is why I cannot accurately assess the work that you did in this essay, Please remember to provide the original prompt requirement the next time you post an essay for review here. That original prompt is of equal importance to your actual writing. The two go hand in hand in terms of reviewing and advising you regarding points for improvement. It appears to me that you forgot to present your opinion at the end of the opening statement. That should have kicked off the essay discussion because this is an opinion essay. It is difficult to assess the relevance of your discussion at this point so I will have to leave the review here. I will give you a better review with your next essay, provided you include the original prompt in your posting.


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