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WRITING TASK 2: DISCUSSION - The main environmental problem of our time



Jadewestboston 1 / 1  
Aug 1, 2023   #1
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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals.
Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.



People have different views regarding the primary environmental issues nowadays. While some individuals argue that the most vital concern lies in the disappearance of various fauna and flora creatures, I strongly agree with those who believe that different ecological challenges are more crucial.

First and foremost, the decline of numerous plants and animals can be considered the most fundamental phenomenon for today's nature-related crisis. It is essential to acknowledge that biology can be adversely affected due to the lack of some particular species as they play a highly significant role in terms of supporting each other. There is no doubt that people are now experiencing environmental damage when some creatures went extinct, for example, the vultures in Africa. Dead bodies of animals such as deer, oxen, and more used to be entirely cleaned by them. Currently, the large number of vultures has decreased, resulting in no corpse cleaners available which triggered many ecological problems for Africans.

However, I would argue that human behaviors are also one of the most essential contributors to biodiversity issues these days. To begin with, people have been cutting significant forests across various countries to construct infrastructures such as roads, buildings, skyscrapers, etc. which has led to the loss of natural habitats for animals and plants. Additionally, environmental issues also bitterly arise from human massive production, for instance, clearing agricultural lands to build industrial factories. Through manufacturing, these factories perpetually release carbon dioxide or poisonous gas into the environment, contributing to ecological challenges, such as air pollution, water pollution, soil pollution, and so on.

In conclusion, it seems to me that many differing factors should be taken into account in terms of the key problem of the environmental crisis at the moment. Authorities need to take adequate measures to ensure that biology, particularly animals and plants, is well-protected.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15393  
Aug 7, 2023   #2
I strongly agree

There is no need for a measured response in this essay. That is not a requirement for the response format. A simple response would have sufficed.

The overall essay is good. Well discussed. I am just concerned that you might not be able to produce the same amount of writing during the actual test. During the practice runs, you can afford to not edit and finalize the content of the paper. However, during the actual test, you will be expected to spend time perfecting the presentation, without the word bloat.

Always remember, it is not the length of the essay that matters, it is the idea you are explaining to the examiner that will be scored. So avoid the word bloat in your next essay. Focus on discussion validity and clarity instead.


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