The reasons that you present within the paper are quite common knowledge. So there is no surprise there. I agree that the topic is quite common and has been discussed to death over the past years in all forms of communication. However, that did not reduce the importance of your observations and suggestions. I was specially impressed with your suggestion that the politicians use alternative forms of transportation in order to serve as examples to their constituents regarding the matter of discouraging people from using cars. Some points of grammatical advice though:
s problems need our immediate attention.
they will change their habits by not using their private cars and start using public .
- ... public transportation
The most effective solution would be to educate the commuters
- commuters about the environmental impact of continued car use.
some public transportation companies should be encouraged to advertise on mass media a service that is both cheap and has a high frequency with cheap price and greater frequency .
- ... public transport companies should be encouraged to develop cheaper methods of transportation that will result in a faster,yet cheaper method of commuting
Importantly equal, educational systems can teach children about the efficiency of using public transport and point out the damage caused by the use of private vehicles. Hence, education can generate the huge effect on a tremendous scale .
To put it briefly, it is obvious that the disadvantages of increasing car use causes many adverse repercussion for our civilization. Therefore, I would like to emphasize and reiterate that discouraging people using cars is inevitable. It is a necessary action to protect our green planet and communities' health
- It is obvious... discouraging people from
using cars is...
See if the essay will flow better for you with these suggestions. There is still room to develop discussion points in all the paragraphs but I am not sure if you are limited by a word count so let me just say that the points presented were quite well thought out but in need of further development and supporting evidence.