The problem of widespread starvation
Topic: In spite of the advances made in algriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.
Why in this case? What can be done about this problem?
World hunger is one of the serious issues that many nations have to face with nowadays, despite the development in algricutural fields. There are some reasons cause this problem, and solution to prevent hunger from expanding widely.
The first reason that strongly contributes to widespread starvation is climate change. Prolong droughts, rainfalls or floods destroy crop, disrupt planting and harvest cycles, which affect to food production. Noticeably, the impact of extreme weather events often be seen in the poorest regions of the world that can make food shortage and famine become more serious. The second cause for world hunger is the proliferation of violents conflicts threatening lifes of many people in the world. Civils living in these zones often choose migrant to new land, where they can have difficulty making ends meet and live in poverty. For instance, civil war in Sudan, which has led to mass displacement and abandoned fields, has caused crop failure, soaring inflation and the apprearance of about 6 million people food - insecre in 2017.
Facing with world hunger being expanding around the world, it is essential for government and large organisations to combine in order to deal with this problem. First of all, limiting the negative impact of climate variability in food production. This can be done by applying new techniques, using modern method instead of horizontal farming. Secondly, the government interventions can strongly contribute to food insecurity of the world. International government should implement laws and regulations to limit and eliminate violent, social riots, conflicts and wars, so that civils can have peaceful lifes, which lead to the minimizing in migration rate and encouraging food production. Further more, the government might pay more attention in expanding social programs for poor people such as donating food to food banks and community organisations, humanitarian food assistances...
In conclusion, it is true that a significant number of people are suffering from famine in spite of the breakthrough in algricultural sector. This can be overcome by the combine of government, organisations and each people.
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Holt Educational Consultant - / 15461 Being a task 2 essay, I do not advise that you write more than 290 words for this essay. With 337 words, I strongly doubt that you would be able to complete this sort of writing in the actual 40 minutes time allotment on the testing day. You are selling yourself short by not allowing yourself a pocket of time to double check your essay before you have to stop writing. Writing between 275-290 words will work best for this purpose. It will also allow you to aim for a better scoring consideration with the examiner as you will have shown that you can explain your reasons quickly in English.
The prompt rephrasing needs to have at least 3 sentences. Actually, all the sentences in each paragraph should not be less than 3 but no more than 5. It has to properly outline the discussion you will be presenting so:
Advances in agronomy seem to not have helped the global starvation problem. A majority of the worldwide population still find themselves lacking in food supplies. I can think of 2 reasons why this continues to happen. I also have a clear idea as to how this problem can be provided with a proper solution.
Just do a clear outline of the upcoming discussion topics. Try to be clear about what your topic paragraphs will be about. Your current presentation isn't really as clear as it can be. I hope you can improve your presentation of this section in the future.
Kindly remember that you will not have the ability to do research for your presentation at the testing center. Use only your common sense, commonly known information, and observations for that part of the essay. You have to practice not doing research this early on so that you will not become reliant upon it and fail the test on the actual day because you don't know how to respond without access to the internet.
Your essay has several spelling problems that you could have spotted if you had done some self - editing of the paper before you decided the content was final. Always spellcheck, grammar check, and review for prompt responsiveness before submitting the paper. Correct what you notice to be errors so that you can get a better overall score. Your spelling errors have forced GRA mistakes. That means your lack of proper editing has caused severe LR and GRA deductions. The LR deductions will be due to the error in word usage. The GRA deductions will be based on the sentence structure errors. You also did not properly use the Oxford comma throughout the essay.
Hopefully, you will have the time to read the sample essays here. You should be able to pick up some valuable pointers from the previous exam takers mistakes that you can help to improve your writing in your next practice essay. There are just too many existing errors in your current presentation for me to present and correct in this post.
