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Topic 2: Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
The world we living in is witnessing some serious environmental problems. It has existed thousands of years and now due to our excessive exploitation on nature, those problems seem to upsurge over time. There are some people believe that extinction of plants and animals is now the most pressing issue, while some others think that there are multiple environment issues that should be concerned about. It is important that I discuss both points of view in order to present my assessment of this topic.
It is clearly that, in a decade lately we have loss many plants and creatures due to poaching and hunting which leads to numerous consequences. Firstly, the biological balance will be damaged, one specie goes into extinct can create threads to others if their gone could cause loss of food sources for animals relying on them. Secondly, not just animals from the wild affected by the disappearance of particular kind of creatures or plants but also humans. We share the same ecosystem with them so our quality of life and our survival linked to their existence.
Despite that disturbing fact, we have to admit that loss of biodiversity is not the biggest problem we are facing with. There are many other problems: air pollution, shortage of clean water, global warming, extreme weather, etc which are directly affecting our life in a negative way. Many diseases appear, kill million people every years and slow the global economy. Human struggle with bad health conditions especially respiratory problems because of the poor quality of air we are breathing.
It is my contention that each problem has its own importance, we should not emphasis on one particular one but the whole situation confronting us and have proper solutions. Governments around the world and every citizen should act right now in order to protect and preserve what the mother nature gave us and improve our quality of life.
Which environmental problem needs immediate attention?
Topic 2: Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
The world we living in is witnessing some serious environmental problems. It has existed thousands of years and now due to our excessive exploitation on nature, those problems seem to upsurge over time. There are some people believe that extinction of plants and animals is now the most pressing issue, while some others think that there are multiple environment issues that should be concerned about. It is important that I discuss both points of view in order to present my assessment of this topic.
It is clearly that, in a decade lately we have loss many plants and creatures due to poaching and hunting which leads to numerous consequences. Firstly, the biological balance will be damaged, one specie goes into extinct can create threads to others if their gone could cause loss of food sources for animals relying on them. Secondly, not just animals from the wild affected by the disappearance of particular kind of creatures or plants but also humans. We share the same ecosystem with them so our quality of life and our survival linked to their existence.
Despite that disturbing fact, we have to admit that loss of biodiversity is not the biggest problem we are facing with. There are many other problems: air pollution, shortage of clean water, global warming, extreme weather, etc which are directly affecting our life in a negative way. Many diseases appear, kill million people every years and slow the global economy. Human struggle with bad health conditions especially respiratory problems because of the poor quality of air we are breathing.
It is my contention that each problem has its own importance, we should not emphasis on one particular one but the whole situation confronting us and have proper solutions. Governments around the world and every citizen should act right now in order to protect and preserve what the mother nature gave us and improve our quality of life.
