The drought is the crucial problem for some areas in the globe like in Papua

Recent year, drought is the crucial problem for some areas in this country like in Papua. Many reasons why it happen and deforestation is one of these reasons. In many perspective, reforestation and forest preservation are the best way to deal with this problem.

First of all, Water is the most important of human needs, but many areas in this country just have little water providing. Deforestation is the main cause of this problem. Marchela, scientist from UGM that focus on plant in her research, say that about 46% trees in this country have been deforested and it makes that area becoming scarcity. Owing to the fact that water can flow easily with subsurface If trees still exist, root of these plant can persevere underground water.

Perserving forest and reforestation are the best way to tackle this problem. Hutama, professor from Upsalla University, say that trees can keep water within subsurface, more tree that still live, more water that is provided. For example, in Borneo, two years ago, this area had a long drought. After there is action to plant trees simultaneously by massive man, right now this area has enough water to fulfil inhabitant needs. On the other hand, deforestation in this country is caused by illegal logging, so to deal with this problem, government should make rule and punishment about that.

All in all, water scarcity is the crucial problem in this country. The main reason of this problem is deforestation and this is caused by many illegal logging. Making rule government about that is the best way to tackle this problem, besides reforestation is needed.

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Recent yearin this day and age, drought is the crucial problembecomes a huge problem in some area s in this country ike in Papua.Many reasons why it happen and deforestation is one of these reasons . the reason why it happened is because of deforetation.

Hi, pram!

Many reasons why it happenhappens and deforestation is ...

In many perspectiveperspectives, reforestation and forest ...

Perservingpreserving forest and reforestation are ...

more treetrees that still live, more ...

After there is action the action to plantof planting trees simultaneously ...

you have to pay attention to subject verb aggrement
and avoid using there is... there are...

Keep writing!!!

Hello Pram, I will give my correction for you

it happenhappens(because the pronoun "it" indicate singular subject in this sentence, so you must use singular verb too)

In many perspectiveperspectives(after the quantifier "many", you must use plural noun)

Marchela, scientist from UGM that focus on plant in her research, saysays that (because subject "Marchela" is singular, so use singular verb too)

root of these plantplants(because the word "thes" indicate plural noun, so you must use "plants")

Hutama, professor from Upsalla University, saysays that (because subject "Hutama" is singular, so use singular verb too)

the government (the word "Government" need article "the" in this sencente because only one noun/things)

thank you