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'We get educated only in school.' What are your views?


ama12321 2 / 4  
Jul 15, 2018   #1

"Education is not preparation for life, education is life itself."


We all know that the reason we go to school is to get educated. But, what is education? Education is the process of recieving instruction so as to better one's knowledge. There are two types of education; Formal and informal. Formal education is where one recieves education from a teacher or a trained professional. Informal education is a type of knowledge that one acquires from anywhere outside of school. This leads back to the question which states 'We get educated only in school'. I believe that we get educated both in and out of school. School equips us with many useful skills and is one of the only places where we can recieve formal education. However, we can also gain knowledge through interaction with others and through technology.

School equips us with many values that we must apply in our lives. Without school, we wont be educated on values such as compassion, humility, responsibility, integrity, service and excellence of success. Without this values, we will not be able to do well in this society. We require this skills to be able to show our employers in the future that we have learnt something in life and have learnt from our actions and consequences.

School is also one of the many few places where we can get formal education. Teachers at schools are people who have went through learning and have proven themselves worthy of being able to teach. They are given a guideline on the schools' education system and only they know what the students really need to know in preparation for an exam such as the GCSE O-Level Examinations. Informal teachers will not be able to properly equip a student for what he needs to know for his exams. They can only teach a subject based on what they know about it and not in reference to what the student needs to know.

We can also gain education from interaction with people. We can acquire useful skills such as social and speaking skills. As we interact with our friends on a day to day basis. We learn how to speak properly and how to interact with people. We cannot get this gain this skill if we are sat infront of a computer all day. Without this skill of being able to properly talk to people, it will be difficult to get a job in the future. The reason that there are job interviews is because employers want to see if you have the skills that they want and whether you are educated enough for the job. This is also where are speaking skills play a very important role.

In this day and age, we can also gain education through technology. Everything that we need to know is on the internet. This is why many students use the internet to get their homework done. But, if we can use it to get our homework done, who is to say that we cannot use it to teach ourselves our exam syllabus. Thus, in this 21st century, we can depend on the internet to gain education.

These are the ways in which we can get educated in and out of school. But what matters most is not how we get our education, but whether or not we actually get the right information or knowledge to benefit us in our day to day and future lives.

jalp 13 / 34 7  
Jul 16, 2018   #2
@ama12321
first, this essay is too long. This probably has 300-400 words. Or maybe more.

This is how you made your essay

Introduction
BP1 school
BP2 school
BP3 interaction
BP4 technology
Conclusion

I think you can integrate your point about school 'not' the only place for education in your body paragraph 1. Try to shorten it and be direct.

You have made a good explanation with interaction and technology plus your grammar is good as well.
Holt - / 7,528 2001  
Jul 16, 2018   #3
Amadeus, are you writing this in response to a task 2 essay or just as a part of your English lesson exercises? The reason I ask is because there are two ways of reviewing this piece of writing that you did. I can either review this as a Task 2 essay or I can just offer grammar feedback and suggestions as to how to improve your opinion presentation. It really depends upon what the purpose of your writing is. I am not really clear as to which type of writing you are trying to do so it would be better for you clarify what sort of writing this is before I proceed with advising you regarding specific considerations.

In general though, this is well thought out and presented paper. It covers certain discussions in more detail than others, but then again, the discussion coverage depends upon the purpose of the writing. It does seem a bit long for an essay but then again, the length depends upon the type of writing you are doing so I cannot judge the length unless I know what type of essay you are writing and what the specific instructions for writing it are. For example, are you responding to a Task 2 prompt or an assigned class discussion? I can't just jump to conclusions in advising you unless I am clear on all aspects for consideration.

Basically, you have the potential to be a good English writer. I just cannot reference other points for improvements until I am clear on what you are required to do in this piece of writing.
OP ama12321 2 / 4  
Jul 16, 2018   #4
@Holt
Hi Mary, thank you for responding to my essay. I am not quite sure what a Task 2 essay is but I can tell you that this is an exam type essay (if that makes sense). The instructions for the essay was to write 350-500 words. I hope this makes it a bit more clearer for you to provide me with what i can do to improve on my essay. Thanks!!
Holt - / 7,528 2001  
Jul 17, 2018   #5
Hey Amadeus, you are one of the lucky few to have gotten a go signal from the admin of this forum for me to come back and give you some additional advice. It's a one time deal so let me get to it now.

Your discussion is sound and shows that you applied a lot of thought to your discussion development process. In fact, the problem with your essay is not the presentation but the grammar used in some instances. In one part, you had a conflicting statement in your single sentence presentation:

School is also one of the many few places where we can get formal education.

- You cannot say that a place has many, yet few places. It is either the place has many places or few places, it can never be both.

You also have a problem discerning when to use "this" and "these". "This" is used to connote a specific person or thing close at hand or being indicated or experienced. While "these" indicates a plural form of "this". Since both "this" and "these" are determiners or pronouns, it will be best for you to get more exercises in this area of English sentence development so you will learn when to use which form of the word.

Save for these problems, your essay is strong and informative. You did well in the exercise as far as I can tell.


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