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İELTS ESSAY- TASK 1 -MAP- AN İSLAND AFTER AND BEFORE CONSTRUCTİON


Student_17 1 / 2 1  
Feb 2, 2014   #1
These two maps show the development of an Island before and after construction of some tourist facilities.
First of all, from the given meters we can say that it is approximately 200 meters from the east to the west of the Island. It is clear that there are big differences between two maps.

In the first view of the Island there are only a few trees in the east and west of the Island before the construction, but from the second map it can be seen that this Island was improved and built new touristic places and houses among those trees.

The pier was made south of the Island for sailing and connected to the reception that is located in the center of the Island by the vehicle track. The reception was surrounded by the vehicle track which links reception to restaurant that is situated in the north of the map.

As this is the Island there are a lot of footpaths. In the East and west of the reception there are accommodations, and Buildings locating west of the map are joined to the reception by the paths. People can also use pathways to go beach in the west of the Is

İ know i am not good at writing. Please give your feedback. Write everything. i appreciate your ideas.thanks




fikri 5 / 317 71  
Feb 2, 2014   #2
good report, but you miss one important part, overview/conclusion
you can put overview in the second paragraph (after introduction) or in the last paragraph
OP Student_17 1 / 2 1  
Feb 2, 2014   #3
thanks for your comment. ))))) next time I will write correctly.)))
Fardhani Putri 23 / 46 7  
Feb 2, 2014   #4
These two maps show the development of an Island before and after construction of some tourist facilities.

...I think you have to paraphrase the introduction
I will give you suggestion for introducion
The two pictures depict the condition of island, before and after the renovation of infrastructure for tourism.
indah_hai 19 / 38 4  
Feb 2, 2014   #5
Hi Student_17,

approximately 200 meters from the east to the west of the Island

I think there are no 100 metres, each of them is 100 metres.

touristic places

I think there is no touristic but tourism

west of the Is

What does "Is" mean?

Well, I think this writing needs overall or conclusion.
This is what I know, and I think you should as Dumi or Pahan for some help to improve the content.
Good luck.. :)
OP Student_17 1 / 2 1  
Feb 2, 2014   #6
yes you are right. thanks for comments.
west of the Is Is - Island i forgot to write all words, sorry


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