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IELTS Writing CO2 emissions for different forms of transport in the European Union


pendar 6 / 12  
Sep 22, 2010   #1
could you Please revise my IELTS essay? I can not upload the charts so I write its address: examenglish.com/IELTS/IELTS_writing.htm

The table below shows CO2 emissions for different forms of transport in the European Union. The Pie Chart shows the percentage of European Union funds being spent on different forms of transport.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The two charts show, How many grams of CO2 emissions are emitted in different types of transport Moreover, how percentage of European Union fund is being spent on each forms of transportation between 2000 and 2013?

According to the charts, Air transport is the biggest producer of co2 emission, over 370 grams for each passenger. Despite the high level of pollution in this transport form, just 1 percent of fund is being expended on airports. Only one-third grams of co2 gases in air transport are produced in passenger cars, nearly 125 grams for each passenger while the grams of co2 are produced from buses is twice fewer than those producing from cars, under 70 grams. Because of prominent role of cars in air pollution, the majority of money is being invested in roads, 52% of total fund.

It is clear that Together with rail and maritime, coaches are one of the three cleanest forms of transportation. Fewer than 50 grams of co2 are being emitted for each passenger in those three types of transportation. After Roads, the considerable amount of fund are being spent on railways, just 31 % , whilst the percentage of fund for ports and inland waterways are less, 2% and 1%, respectively.

Thanks alot

shofa_nefertete 12 / 35  
Sep 22, 2010   #2
There are some errors on punctuations at the same time. This lacks major trending on the bar graph. The pie chart lacks display of stylistic language.


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