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Which environment is better for children to grow up? Countryside or City?



bahareh 18 / 48  
May 2, 2011   #1
Parents always consider about their children's success, and the environment in which a child grows plays a large role in this process. Some people think growing up in a countryside can bring out many advantages such as growing up healthy, or promoting good manner in children; however, others believe that living in a big city contributes to the better education and more facilities to live. I do believe that growing up children in a big city helps them to achieve more qualification for the better job, and receiving higher facilities for their lives.

First, obviously children who are living in a big city find the better education than those do in countryside. There are many different universities or colleges with various study fields which provide students a chance to choose their favorite subjects. This opportunity provides a good qualification for a better job. On the other hand, in countryside there are few institutions in which prepare some common fields to study, so those who dwelling in the countryside are often confronted with limited education prosperity. This limitation turns to be unqualified for a suitable job.

Second, the infrastructure in a big city is much better than in countryside, so the life in there is more convenient than it does in rural. People have more facilities in urban than they do in villages. For instance, roads, subway, power supplies, and other facilities like advanced Medical access help people's life seem more comfortable and convenient. However, in a rural, people who never find such facilities, have to travel to urban to obtain their necessities like some Medical procedure. Although growing up in a rural may face to many obstacles, they benefit clean fresh air, and beautiful view which lead to a healthy life. In countryside, people feel safer because they see their environment as almost a crime free area compare to the environment in a big city.

Even though in a country side people find a peaceful environment for their children to growing up healthy, they rarely access to highly qualify academic institution to educate their children for a better life with more facilities. I think people should be considered about all factors that impact on their children's progress through living in a big city. They can find all important aspects that they need for their children and also should be caution by its disadvantages.

lovelysmile 4 / 3  
May 3, 2011   #2
growing up health , or promoting good manners in children.

People have more modern facilities in urban than they do in villages.

roads, subways , power supplies, and other facilities.

so the life in there is more convenient than it does in rural.

and beautiful views which lead to a healthy lifeare good for health of children

I think you used the words "growing up " and " facilities " many times, you can find synonyms of them to make your essay diverse
OP bahareh 18 / 48  
May 4, 2011   #3
Thanks a lot , but I still need more advise for my essay format and how successfully I could point out both side of advantages and disadvantages for the subject.

bahareh
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
May 4, 2011   #4
... that living in a big city provides access to better education and more facilities in which to live.

I do believe that growing up raising children in a big city helps them to achieve...

On the other hand, in the countryside there are few institutions in which that prepare some...

... common fields to study, so those who dwelling in the countryside are often confronted with limited education prosperity funding.

Although growing up in a rural setting may involve many obstacles, they benefit from clean, fresh air and a beautiful view which lead to a healthy life.

Even though in the countryside people find a peaceful environment for their children to grow up healthy, they rarely have access to highly qualify academic institutions to educate their children for a better life with more facilities.

Nice job! Keep practicing. The meaning is clear, and the mistakes are not very significant. :-)
OP bahareh 18 / 48  
May 5, 2011   #5
Thankyou so much .
bahareh
nathanloa 2 / 8  
May 6, 2011   #6
Hi,

I guess you have a bit of problem with your accuracy. The following one is what i spotted when i was reading your writing a while ago.

Second, the infrastructure in a big city is much better than in countryside, so the life in there is more convenient than it does in rural.

It should be corrected this way.

...is much better than in countryside, so the life there is more convenient than it IS in the countryside.
blazer 3 / 9  
May 6, 2011   #7
The problems of survival have never been so great as they are today. Do you agree?

This essay is referring to pollution, war, epidemics that could wipe us all and moral degradation on homosexuality!

Please, I need an essay on this of about 500 - 800 words.

Thanx :)
OP bahareh 18 / 48  
May 6, 2011   #8
Thankyou Nathanloa for your suggestion. I totally agree with you and I need to practice to get more accuracy for my essay.
bahareh


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