Ielts: Can environmental problems be solved by individuals?

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Some people claim that environmental issues can't be tacked by individual because of its difficulty and complexity. However, others believe each person or country singly play a significant role in solving many environmental problems. In my view, individuals can put their efforts in improving our surroundings.

To begin with, a small act can make a big change. Start from replacing the use of private transport by using public ones, each citizen has contributed to reduce the carbon dioxide emission on Earth. Raising awareness of each individual should be emphasized in school activities. Take my school as an example, twice a semester, students are encouraged to join the event titled "Plant tree, build future" to plant at least one tree in school back yard. This event is truly helpful in teaching students the importance of planting trees and conserving our globe. Plus, each country should impose higher tax on gasoline to curb the use of gasoline and stricter punishment on criminal activities to safeguard the natural environment.

In the other words, some environmental problems are only solved with the cooperation among countries in the world. One approach is Kyoto protocol. This treaty is highly considered as a practical and necessary step of international community on facing current environmental facts. Joined members in this protocol need to put forward immediate and effective solutions to tackle environmental issues. Furthermore, richer countries should release some packs of aid to support poorer ones develop abilities in conserving natural environment.

In conclusion, I strongly agree that each individual is a decisive factor in protecting the globe from negatives effects or even the self-damage. With non-stop attempt and awareness of each person, we have rights to believe in a brighter future with fresh air and green surroundings.

This essay is good. However, I have a few points to share:


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initiate efforts / make an effort


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This interrupts the flow. If you could, rewrite this sentence.


Well, you'd better present the other ones with academic tone. There are many common linkers or appropriate conjunctions.


if you present an example, try to write it clearly. To have one, you should ask some journalistic questions: how many? how? who? what? when? results?. By this, I am sure that you will have details as to support the topic sentence.

Have look at this "specific example":
Many everyday practices are now performed by machines instead of people and this has resulted in less need for labour. For example, in recent decades nearly all major banks have replaced telephone operators with telephone switchboards that have recorded messages and all banks now have automated teller machines (ATMs). This reduces the need for people to visit the bank itself and has resulted in a corresponding decrease in the need for the bank staff. As bank and other similar business strive for profit, this is likely to increase unemployment further in the future.

Who? Banks
How many? nearly all
When? Over the last few decades
What? Replaced need for telephone operators and bank tellers
How? Using switchboards and ATMs
Result? People don't need to visit the bank and less staff are needed

When you deal with IELTS, the first thing the assessor sees is your layout, which shows whole of your essay. If the layout is difficult to read, which is let's say: no spaces between paragraphs, then he/she immediately knows your writing needs more work to read. Hence, I suggest you to leave one space every time you open a new paragraph.