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Essay on equal gender in university



pupi 1 / 1  
Feb 27, 2009   #1
Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Gender equality is standard in the modern world. Today, man and woman is equal in laws, even woman has more protection. But it is unreasonable gender equality must be carried out in everything. As an example, equal numbers of male and female students in every subject in the university is unable to accept. Student performance and preference is reasons.

Firstly, universities usually base on student performance in pre-university like high school to enroll new students. Therefore, numbers of male and female in subjects is not always equal. If university tries to balance rate of sex, this will lead to accept students who do not meet the requirements. For this reason, educational environment of university will be affected. Number is what university cares about, not quality.

Secondly, the interest level in a specific subject might be very high for mal and low for female or reserve. For a sample, three male and twenty female students apply for dance subject, it may be unfair if we take three boys and three girls in that class for satisfying gender equality, maybe there are students who have more talent than male students in seventeen remaining female students. Always obeying equal gender is like quota in trading, this limits performance of students.

In conclusion, gender equality is not equal numbers of male and female. In a class, it is good if we balance amount of male and female but not in every class and every subject. There are particular cases, arranging numbers of male and female students in a subject should be flexible.

this is a writing essay in IELTS, may I have your rating per feedback?

EF_Sean 6 / 3460  
Feb 27, 2009   #2
Here are some grammatical fixes for you:

"Gender equality is standard in the modern world. Today, me n and wome n are equal under the laws, even woman has more protection . But it is unreasonable for gender equality to be defined as gender samenessmust be carried out in everything . As anFor example, it would be unreasonable for a university to try to accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject in the university is unable to accept ."

"Student performance and preference is reasons." You need to expand on this sentence for it to make sense.

"Firstly, universities usually base admittance on student performance in pre-university like high school to enroll new students . Therefore, the numbers of male and female students accepted into different departments will subjects is not always be equal. If the university tries to balance the ratioof male to female students , they will lead tohave to accept students who do not meet the requirements. For this reason, the educational environment of the university will be affected. NumberQuality is what the university should cares about, not numbersquality ."
OP pupi 1 / 1  
Feb 28, 2009   #3
thanks :)
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Feb 28, 2009   #4
I don't know how hight the standards are for IELTS, but this is looking very good. Implement Sean's changes, and you will be doing even better. Great job!!


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