Is it essential for newcomers to get used and follow the traditions and culture in a foreign country

People should follow the customs and traditions when people start to live in a new country. Agree or not?

adaptation in another country

It is often said that it is essential for newcomers to get used and follow the traditions and culture in a foreign country. In my opinion, I completely agree with this idea.

In the first place, people who have just started living abroad tend to face a great deal of problems if they cannot follow the local tradition. For example, if they want to set up a bussiness, conducting knowledge of local bussiness customs in the host country must be necessarily done in order to make you business a success, Besides new residents also need to profoudly learn new laws and get away from some actions that seem normal in one country but may be considered illegal in another, which sometimes put you in a big trouble.

In the second place, there are various benefits for a new resident to follow local customs and traditions. First of all, by doing so, you can easily make friends and integrate in the new community. As a matter of fact, people are more likely to accept those who have the same customs and behaviors like them. Secondly, ì new immigrants are acquainted with the new culture, they will be able to fully enjoy the traditions and take part in a new community life by local festival or traditional activities.

In conclusion, in order to adapt to a new life in another country, trying to follow the customs and cultures of the host country is extremely important that can bring you integration and convenience in the new community

Seol, one of the main problems in your essay is that it becomes incoherent and non-cohesive in presentation due to the poorly developed sentence and paragraph presentations. Almost every paragraph in your essay is a run-on sentence. You must learn how to use other punctuation marks other than the comma. The most important punctuation mark for use in this essay is the period. Use it well and you will present highly developed ideas and thoughts within your paragraphs.

Do not bother to use numerical sequencing when creating your discussion. A 3 body paragraph is too short for that. Instead, just discuss each point directly. This will show a confidence in your writing style that is often covered up by weak writers using sequencing references. The authority and convincing power of the statements you presented weakened due to the numerical referencing at the start.

Your opening statement is also improperly presented. Refer to the following correct representation instead for future reference:

Some people believe that the culture and way of life of a country one is moving to must be followed. This will help them start a new life in the country. Others think this is not necessary. I agree with the belief that assimilating into a new culture is important when a person decides to take residence in a different part of the world.

Since there is no reference to an "extent" of your opinion, there is no need to use terms such as "completely" in the discussion instruction representation. A simple statement of "agree" or "disagree" would have been sufficient enough.

You need to practice due diligence in your essay writing by proof-reading, editing, and properly revising the essay to suit the prompt requirements and scoring considerations. You can spot the places in your work where you failed to do that. Make sure you avoid the same mistakes in the future.

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@Holt
Thank you very much for your comment. I really appreciate it and will try my best to follow your useful advice