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IELTS TASK 1 : THE ESSENTIAL SKILL IN JOB AS PER SURVEY


Mardy17 32 / 18 5  
Jan 20, 2016   #1
The table chart compares the proportion of communication competencies which are crucial in occupation as per the opinion of respondents on surveys in 1997 and 2007. Overall, it can be analyzed that the sequences of skills from the most important to the lowest in both of survey in 1997 and 2006 remained unchanged. In any case, dealing with people was the most important skills in a job, while conducting presentation was assumed as an unessential expertise in a profession.

To begin, the survey in 1997 reveals that being faced with other people, listening to colleagues, advising for a client, knowing of products and training people were the top five crucial skills which the percentage reached of 60, 38, 36, 35 and 25 percent consecutively. Interestingly, these competencies, based on the survey in 2006, were still in the top five though there was an alteration formation between caring for costumers and knowing of a particular product.

On the other hand, the five remaining skills such as analyzing work together with others, selling a product, persuading others, planning the activities of others, and making a presentation were valued by respondent as the five lowest necessities in job which based on the current study showed that the rates realized at fewer than 26%, while in the oldest survey gained at just under 24%.




sir99 7 / 8 2  
Jan 20, 2016   #2
To begin, the survey in 1997 reveals REVEALED that being faced with other (...) top five crucial skills which the percentage reached of 60, ...

... lowest necessities in job which based on the current study WAS showed BY THE CURRENT STUDY that the rates realized at fewer ...
nuni11 33 / 30 5  
Jan 20, 2016   #3
..to the lowest in both of surveys ...

were still in the top five though there was an alteration formation between caring for costumers and knowing of a particular product

I think you should explain what kind of chance in the survey, is it increase or decrease. The same case happens in the next paragraph, you should make clear explanation about the five higer-ranks of abilities and the reverse. Another suggestion to explain this table is by analyzing the internal and external factorals of the skills.
amrillahmk31 15 / 17 2  
Jan 27, 2016   #4
Overall, it can be analyzed use analyse instead,cause that is british that ...

... selling a product, persuading others, planning the activities of others it should be "planning activities for others", ...


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