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'Europe had degraded most of its land' - three regions of the world during 1990's

kashaf 1 / -  
Jul 22, 2014   #1
The pie chart illustrates the main reason why agricultural land become less productive in the three regions of the world during 1990's.

It was evaluated that there were four causes of land degration. 35% of land is degraded because of Over-grazing. Deforestation is another cause for land degration which effects 30%of the land. 28% of worldwide land is degraded because of the Over-cultivation of land. The rest 7% of the pie belongs to other reasons.

On the other hand, in the second part of the chart it shows the causes of land degration by region. Out of the three regions surveyed, Deforestation and Over-cultivation had more impact on the loss of land productivity in Europe. Whereas, in Oceania Over-grazing was suffered the most.

To sum up, Europe had degraded most of its land while the impact of this on Oceania and North America was minimal.

dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jul 22, 2014   #2
First, you need to upload the charts in to the thread for us to provide you with more meaningful feedbacks. Without seeing the charts, we cannot form any opinion on your writing. Use the "Attach file(s)" feature in the Message Block to upload your image file.

As for the approach for this task, I wish you follow this;
1. Introduction - Introduce the charts very briefly and include if there is any time frames involved with them
2. Overview - This should give an overall idea about what the charts present. So tell the reader about the main trends or observations very very briefly. Do not have any details like percentages, data etc. in this overview.

3. Detailed paras - Now describe the trends with all details :)

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