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Everyone should have a person who you interested (my nephew)



lwshing 2 / 4  
Jan 9, 2011   #1
Can you all help me mark and correct this essay as fast as you can...

Everyone should have a person who you interested.

In this case, i would like to talk about my youngest brother in my family.Without he i would not be as happy as i am now.

He is 6 years old already and he is study in a kindergarden that near my house.Although he is 6 yeaars old ,he looks thin and short because he does not like to take dinner as well as he can.He has a smooth pale skin and cheek.His favourite action is bite his own finger this action cause he looks adorable.He is looking smart also when he is studying ,actually he is naughty than a monkey.

He is courageous kid.My nephew looks big,strong and like to bully he but my brother will try to revenge him back also.He is person can make you stay at home as long as you can because when you facing he,you just want to play with he and does not go out with friend.He looks energetic also,he is always trying play games with my family that is why my father ask me play with he always.

Although he is naughty,i am still love he forever.Everyone should take care person who you interested.

peevzeeweez 2 / 5  
Jan 9, 2011   #2
Sorry that came out all wrong.. I'm new to this website

Here is the edited version:

Everyone should have one person who is more important to them than anyone else

In this case, i would like to talk about my youngest brother. Without him i would not be as happy as i am now.

He is 6 years old already and he studies in a kindergarden near my house. Although he is 6 years old, he looks thin and short because he does not like to eat a lot. He has a smooth pale skin and cheeks. His loves biting his own finger, and I find this adorable. He looks smart and well-behaved when he studies, but he is actually as naughty as a monkey.

He is a courageous kid. My nephew looks big and strong and likes to bully, but my brother is never afraid to fight back. He has the power to make me stay at home and play with him for hours on end, just because it is so hard to say no that face of his. He is always energetic and in the mood to play, and he livens up our home.

Although he is naughty,i will still always love him. Everyone should take care of the person who is the most important to them.
OP lwshing 2 / 4  
Jan 13, 2011   #3
thank you for correct my essay above.if can i hope you can correct my essay when everytime i write my essay.i know my English laguage have a serious problem.sorry and thank you.
peevzeeweez 2 / 5  
Jan 15, 2011   #4
I just realised I made a few mistakes in the first paragraph:

He is 6 years old already and he studies in a kindergarden near my house. Although he is 6 years old, he looks thin and short because he does not like to eat a lot. He has a smooth pale skin and cheeks. He loves biting his own finger, and I find this adorable. He looks smart and well-behaved when he studies, but he is actually as naughty as a monkey.

And I'm happy to help with any of your other essays :)


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