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Everything has two sides to it, and no except to cycling. Let's consider its pros and cons.


bngoc28 1 / 2  
Jul 27, 2020   #1

Discuss about the advantages and disadvantages of cycling



It's the fact that cycling bring us many benefits. Firstly, using bicycle instead of car or motorbike save you amount off money. Imagine you drive a private car or motorbike, you must pay for not only cost of petrol but also the regular maintence fee. Furthermore, the price of buying car or motorbike is not cheap itself. Another positve side of cycling is that it is good for our health. Cycling not only helps our muscles tone but it also helps to escape from stress. Cycling outdoors is also a good way to "make friends" with nature and enjoy fresh air, dispel all our daily sadness and stress. The last advantage of cycling is that we can protect our environment. Almost people us car and motorbike. It helps to save time but it release a large amount of exhaust fumes and smog, which pollute air. Cycling does not create emissions, the air is not polluted and our environment becomes greener, cleaner and more beautiful.

On the other hand, there are some disadvantages with using bicycle. The problem that confuse people is that it wastes time. In the same distance - 2 kilometers if using motorbike it will take 5 minutes, but if cycling it will take about 15 minutes. Besides, if we need to move far, cycling is not a good choice. For example, in case we need to move long distance over 10 kilometers, cycling will waste much time and effort. But if we use car or motorbike, it will not take too much time to arrive, even it is more quickly and we do not spend too much effort to move. So many people choose to use car and motorbike more than bicycle.

In conclusion, there are both positive and negative aspects of cycling. Personally, I still believe that using bicycle iss better for our life.

Bettie Orion 3 / 11  
Jul 27, 2020   #2
Hi! Here are my suggestions. Hope this helps:

+ cycling brings us ...
+ save you a large amount off money
+ maintenance fee
+ ..., the price of buying a car or ... cheap itself.
+ "Almost people us car and motorbike." this sentence is unclear
+ which pollute the air
+ ... disadvantages with to using bicycles.
OP bngoc28 1 / 2  
Jul 27, 2020   #3
@Bettie Orion
thank you very much. what do think about my grammar?
Holt [Contributor] - / 9,031 2721  
Jul 27, 2020   #4
You may want to reconsider your presentation. It is only really effective in delivering the advantages and disadvantages of cycling as you are not explaining each aspect of the discussion. For every reason you provide a complete explanation must be provided:

- Dis/Advantage
- Reason
- Example
- Supporting explanation for the example
- Additional information ( optional)

If this is only for an English grammar essay, then you should be learning how to properly separate your explanations by paragraph. That is done by topic. Your presentation does not do that.

Each topic needs one paragraph so your can fully explain the reason for the topic. So in this case, one advantage topic and one disadvantage topic would have sufficed.

Please let me know next time if you are writing a grammar practice essay or an English exam essay. If it is for an English exam, kindly identify what type so you can get a targeted review of your work. Thanks.
OP bngoc28 1 / 2  
Jul 29, 2020   #5
@Holt
thanks for commenting my essay


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