IELTS essay: Factors Contributing to Job Satisfaction

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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well being.
What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

Mostly, whenever people look for a job, they think about their long term future. As such, it becomes imperative for them to find a job which is interesting and fulfilling on a personal level. In other words, they must be satisfied with the job they want to spend their life on.

There are many factors which have impact on the job satisfaction of an employee. Financial security is probably the primary and most important of them all. If a person is not paid adequately so that he can prosper and enjoy life's perks, he will hardly be satisfied with his job.

Secondary factors like, a compatible working environment is essential to the happiness of an employee. Unfriendly colleagues and unnecessary competition often give rise to a hostile atmosphere, resulting in conflicts, reduced performances and depression. The number of working hours also has an effect on the likeability of the job. A person is not likely to enjoy his work if he does not get enough time to spend with his friends and family. Another significant factor is the relevance of the job to the employee's background. Working in a different field to one's educational background may involve several adjustments, which some people may not be comfortable with.

The extent to which workers can expect job satisfaction may depend on the location of their work. Someone from a developed country, like the US or UK would have better financial stability and less competition than workers from developing countries. People from poor countries usually think about the money they will earn rather than how much they will like the work. Secondly, an employed worker from such a country hardly looks for other avenues as laziness or complacency creeps in. There is also fierce competition in overpopulated places, which makes any job seem priceless.

In conclusion, I have to say that job satisfaction is a very important aspect of a worker's life. The factors discussed above can provide it to some level. While the concept of job satisfaction is prevalent in the developed countries, there is still very little scope for expectation in the developing countries.

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Due to the success of Industrial Revolution, the mainstream of lifestyle of human being has experienced an unprecedented transformation. Most time of each day is spending in workplaces instead of at home or in farmland. Correspondingly, most time of our lives will connect with job together. For individuals, whether a job brings individual's satisfaction or not, plays an important effect on personally happiness and enjoyment.

When individuals choose a job, the factors they often consider consist of personal interest, income and the atmosphere of workplace. Which dominates among them depends on the specific situation. For instance, a wealthy employee tends to choose his/her career from personal interest, so that he/she can fulfil personal potential maximum. In contract, a person from an impoverished family more tends to choose career from the angle of total income. The more the income is the more possibility for him/her to engage in it. The team atmosphere and work environment also play some roles in the process of seeking a job, as there is plenty of evidence that a large number of people keep changing their jobs just because they are not satisfied with work environment or the cooperation atmosphere of work group.

Besides what mentioned above, there are still other influences such as the person diploma, distance between home and workplace, traffic condition, local climate also affecting personal choice. Take personal diploma as an example, high educated individuals have more job opportunities so that they even can change the place, like going abroad to seek a high salary job. On the other hand, it is also possible that there are some people who are not willing to leave their home and prefer to work locally.

To sum up, as different people have different limited factors as well as personal position, the influences of job satisfaction should not only be restricted in the factors mentioned above. But over all, I think personal education background, interests, as well as salary occupy a majority of percentage among the factors of job satisfaction.

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I am interested in you topic , so write one myself. I have read yours, and there seems no grammer errors, but I personal think the sencond paragraph should be extended.

actually the second and third paras are one paragraph. i mistakenly pressed the enter key when i was pasting it :)

Your essay certainly gives a different point of view from mine.

Anyway, thanks for your feedback.

Hey, it is pretty great that Cathy wrote one, too. You two are getting good practice.
Cathy, usually it is better to start a new thread when you post an essay but in this case I'll leave these two in the same thread.

Most of the time, whenever people look for a job they think about their long term future. Therefore, it becomes imperative --- I took out "as such." as such means "because (something is a certain way). In this case, therefore is better to use.

In other words, they must be satisfied with the job they want to spend their life on.

Here, you need the word incompatible:
Working in a field incompatible with one's educational background may involve several adjustments with which some people may not be comfortable. --- You are not supposed to end sentences with prepositions. Not a very important rule, though.

:-)

This is well-constructed sentence:
The extent to which workers can expect job satisfaction may depend on the location of their work. -- very good.

Correspondingly, most time of our lives will connect involve the job. For individuals, whether a job brings individual's satisfaction or not, it plays an important effect on personally happiness and enjoyment.

Besides what is mentioned above, there ...

But Overall, I think personal education background, interests, as well as salary occupy a majority of percentage among the factors of job satisfaction.

:-)

Thanks Kevin, you are always an inspiration.