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Fast food Vs Home-Cooked Food; 'mode of preparation and natural ways of cooking'


posdream 4 / 12 5  
Aug 9, 2013   #1
Some people think that cooking food at home is a waste of time. They prefer fast food over home cooked food. How much do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that fast foods are better than home cooked foods whereas another group of people feel home cooked food is more advantageous than fast food. However, I strongly agree with the latter statement.

Home cooked food are prepared with great supervision,in an hygenic environment. Kitchens are cleaned virtually everyday to make them germs-fress. On the contrary,fast foods are prepared in an averagely clean surrounding. One might not be too sure how often the cutleries are being washed and dried for further use.

A cafeteria attends to loads of customers in a day,people with different eating etiquettes and contagious diseases. This will be unknown to the attendant. Of course, microorgamisms cannot be seen without the help of a microscope.

Secondly, public food are a lot more expensive than cooking at home. For instance,in my country,a plate of fried rice with chicken in a eatery cost nothing less than £5,meanwhile,this amount can feed a family of three a whole day if they cook their food at home.

In addition,majority of the fast food we consume contains one or two additives to make their food look or taste good. This is because they want customers to have false impression about the foods they prepared. In contrast,home-cooked food does need to look attractive before eating. There are also some methods of preservations used by fast food companies that can be life threatening.

To summarize my points, I believe home cooked food has a lot of benefits than fast food because of the mode of preparation and natural ways of cooking without additives. It also enables one to save in good health.

moonname 6 / 14 2  
Aug 9, 2013   #2
Hi.

I think your reasons are convincing enough and also you are able to use variety of words correctly. But the introduction of your essay is too simple and short, especially compared with the other paragraphs. It's necessary to mention your key points in the first paragraph. it provides illustrative preface for your argument as well.

meanwhile, thank you so much for your beneficial advice. :)
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Aug 10, 2013   #3
Some people believe that fast foods are better than home cooked foods whereas another group of people feel home cooked food is more advantageous than fast food.

....let's have a look at your prompt;

Some people think that cooking food at home is a waste of time. They prefer fast food over home cooked food. How much do you agree or disagree?

.... your prompt does not talk about the opposite idea . i.e. some people prefer home cooked food to fast food. So, don't include that in your introduction and stay only with what your prompt talks about. This is my suggestion;

Some people believe that fast foods are a better option compare to home cooked foods. However, I do not agree with this belief and feel that home cooked food are much better in terms of hygienic and health factors.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Aug 11, 2013   #4
Some people believe that fast foods are better than home cooked foods whereas another group of people feel home cooked food is more advantageous than fast food.

... this is the background of your prompt. Before this, start your essay with a hook that grabs readers attention;
Nowadays, fast foods are becoming increasingly popular and trendy.
gmad06 20 / 151 55  
Aug 11, 2013   #5
Hi,

I believe you are studying for IELTS because the prompt seems familiar to me. If that is the case, I think your essay is quite short and there is no proper flow of your ideas. You need to improve a lot on structure and paragraphing. Most of all, read the task carefully, this is where you loose all your points. I think you have the potential, you just need to learn some of the tips shared in the forums here.

hope this helps...
OP posdream 4 / 12 5  
Aug 11, 2013   #6
Thanks so much

@gmad06...yes i am for IELTS, thanks for your contribution...i am hoping to improve too. my exam is for 29th AUG.


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