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Fatherhood and motherhood roles continue a controversial topic in the days and ages


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Oct 10, 2021   #1

Fatherhood is important as motherhood. Discuss



Fatherhood and motherhood roles continue a controversial topic in the days and ages. In Western countries, child - rearing is accepted as a responsibility of both parents. Nevertherless, in the less developed countries, a father still holds more traditional role as a breadwinner. I will discuss the both sides

Many people embrace the idea that taking care of children is the mother's mission. They think a mother should stay at home and look after children instead of going out and earning the living. In the contrary, the responsibility of a father is to make sure the household finance is sufficent, and spend time to rear children will interfere with his ability to financially support

From my perspective, a child has been reared by both father and mother will develop fully physical and emotional sides. It is serious if you take fatherhood for granted. A father will raise the child up when he falls or play with his child as a peer. Futhermore, I strongly believe that a father can best teach their childen qualities such as courage, confidence and enthusiasm.
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Oct 11, 2021   #2
The essay automatically garners severe word count penalties for containing only 180 words when the minimum is 250. This indicates the nability of the examinee to carryon a lengthy academic conversation in written form. Perhaps this was caused by limited English vocabulary. Perhaps, he was unfamiliar with the standard 4 paragraph writing format (This only has 3 paragraphs). Whatever the reason, an effort to present an extended discussion in written form is necessary.

I will discuss the both sides

There are only 2 applicable prompts for this topic:
- What is your opinion?
- To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The writer is not using either of the standard prompts. It appears that he either:
- Misunderstood the prompt
- Created his own prompt by accident

Either reason will be enough to fail the test based on an inaccurate response. It can therefore be.said, that there are several major reasons this essay is not going to help the test-taker pass the test.


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