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Fathers influence BOYs and Mothers influence GIRLs ; IELTS


malhamed 9 / 19  
Apr 6, 2013   #1
The boys are most influenced by their fathers and girls are most influenced by their mothers. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and details to support your opinion.

Effect of parents on children
The children's personality is affected mostly by their parents. But there are many arguments whether they are more influenced by their mother or the boys are influenced by the father and girls are influenced by the mother through this essay I will address the points that support the latter statement. And how it is attributed to the human nature and parents being the closest and trusted example to follow by their children.

Firstly, it is the nature of human children to copy and act like their parents, especially following the same gender. For example, in many families we can see a4yers? Girl wearing her mothers jewelry and high hill shoes. Where her 5 years old brother may wear his father's hat, shoes and cigar. This behavior of the children shows us how they follow their parents and how each one of them is trying to become like the biggest sexual match in the family thus, as this example results, it is clear that boys are influenced by their father and girls are influenced by their mother naturally ,and no one has told them to do so.

Moreover, children are also being affected by their sexual matching parent because he/she is the closest and the most trusted role model to follow. One of my friends for instance has both son and daughter. His son always shares with him his ideas and his activities at school. When his daughter does the same but with her mother. The son knew that his father understand those ideas from the men view point, and so, the father is the best source of consultation for him. This example shows how children have more trust on their sexual matching parent and how does that parent is becoming as a trusted example to follow.

In a nutshell, it is clear that parents have big effect on children personality and that children are more influenced by their sexual matching parent than anyone else. Hence, I hope that all parents be a good example for their children.
jaijagadeesh 7 / 13  
Apr 6, 2013   #2
I would say,it is a good essay. It has everything to attract good band score,best of luck
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Apr 6, 2013   #3
The children's personality is affected influenced mostly by their parents.

...."affect" is not the most appropriate word here. As per your topic, the ideal word to use here is "influence"... you can even use the word "shape".

. But there are many arguments whether they (both girls and boys?) are more influenced by their mother or the boys are influenced by the father and girls are influenced by the mother through this essay I will address the points that support the latter statement.

.... this sentence is too long and does not flow logically. There are repetition of ideas too.... Restrict one idea to one sentence and that would help you to have a smooth flow of ideas without being carried away.

Some people believe that fathers have more influence on boys while mothers influence girls more. However, others view this differently and believe that there is no such phenomenon that exists in real life

And how it is attributed to the human nature and parents being the closest and trusted example to follow by their children.

... this is irrelevant and does not contribute any valuable idea to your topic. Always stay aligned with the topic.


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