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Female Unemployment Rates In Each Country Of The United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014



yus72 6 / 5  
Jan 21, 2016   #1
The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014.

A description of the proportion of the female jobless rates in each country of the United Kingdom during 2013 to 2014 is illustrated in bar chart. Overall, it is important to notice, the figures was fluctuation over the period. How ever the number of female jobless in Northern Ireland reached to peak at 6,8% in 2013.

Moving to more detail analyze, to begin to 2013, the proportion of female unemployment in England stood at 6,8 % and it was highest that compared the other country. On the other hand, Scotland had the proportion of women jobless at 6,7% in 2014. And also became the highest of woman jobless in this period. But it was still lower than England.

On the other hand, the country had lowest proportion of female unemployment rate was wales at 5,4% in 2013 and had The percentage of female jobless at 5% in 2014.


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eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1170  
Jan 21, 2016   #2
the figures was fluctuation

This is good. Yet, I prefer using "showed" rather than "was". Here is The figure showed some fluctuations in unemployment rates.

How ever the number of female jobless

However, the number of unemployed females

reached to peak at 6,8% in 2013.

It is always good to write no figure/ number/ percentage in the overview. Save it for the body.

Moving to more detail analyze,

If it has no detailed information, then writing this phase is useless. Therefore, I omit it.

to begin to 2013, the proportion of female unemployment in England stood at 6,8 % (a comma) and it was highest that compared WITH the other country. On the other hand, THE FIGURE FOR Scotland had the proportion of women WHO HAD NO WORKjobless at 6,7% in 2014. And alsoTHEREFORE,THIS became the highest of jobless womaE n jobless in this period. ButHOWEVER , it was still lower than England's FIGURE .


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