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Essay about finding out about the history of the house


maithuytram 1 / -  
Mar 12, 2023   #1
TOPIC :
In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.

What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?



In some countries, homeowners have increasingly concerned about the history of the house which they live in. I think they research it for many reasons, and there are a variety approaches that people can do to find out this information.

Determining to buy or rent a house means you and your family have to stick with it for a long time. Therefore, except the issues regarding to feng shui sciences such as choosing its direction, position, many people are also curious about the history of the building. Is this house haunted by a spirit? Was it built over a cemetery? Is there any special thing happened with this house before? These factors can affect your later life. In this sense, they tend to avoid living in that house or building.

On the other hands, there are numerous people who passionate in architecture. They want to know what kind of architectural style of their house, what inspired the former owner building it. That is kind of connection between the owner and the house. The more they understand about their accommodate structure, they more they enjoy the space.

People can figure out this information by two main ways. Firstly, they can gain variety data through the internet. Pictures, videos, articles, advertisements are always available there. Secondly, some neighbors are worthwhile source of information. They may provide many useful story than you can expect.

In conclusion, I suppose the tracing about the history of our house is important and necessary. Alongside with that, we have some possible ways to go about researching this history.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,686 4759  
Mar 14, 2023   #2
Your topic restatement keeps too many keywords from the original presentation for the examiner to view it as a new presentation. You need to build your synonym vocabulary to improve that part of your writing skills. Avoid referencing uncertainty in your opinion statements as well. If you do not fully believe what you are saying, neither will the examiner. By the way, points were lost for your non-responsive opinion presentation because you failed to respond in summary form to the guide questions. That hsould have been a definitive 3 sentence presentation.

Do not deviate from the discussion. I understand that you culture gives weight to Feng Shui and other luck related actions, the rest of the world does not. You have deviated from the actual discussion topic, which means that reference will cause C+C deductions for your presentation. Stay on track, do not include irrelevant topics.

Your discussion is under developed because of 2 reasons: (1) prompt deviation and (2), lack of reasoning development in the relevant paragraph. This is not an essay that will get a passing score since even the English transition phrases are incorrectly used.


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