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Foods preparation methods. I really appreciate if you can help me out with my essay



chocuatt 3 / 5  
Aug 14, 2017   #1
Topic: Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Convenience foods vs traditional foods



There has been a considerable increase of total expenditure of convenience foods in many developed countries. Hence, some people have projected that if there is no restriction or regulation, it will be widespread and thus the disappearance of traditional foods. However, in my view, I would argue that this circumstance will not correct itself over time.

There are clearly certain advantages to convenience foods which make it become an attractive option. It is true that this kind of food needs less preparation than the conventional ones, therefore saves a lot of time. With advances in food technology, it has been upgraded significantly in terms of variety, quality and a large range of expenses which completely satisfies the vast consumer market. It could also be disputed that this food sector gains desirably tremendous profits.

Nevertheless, traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation have become an unreplaceable aspect of culture and life. In important occasions such as weddings, Thanksgiving or Christmas, a traditionally prepared meal has always been an integral part over time. In many countries, especially in the Asia, being able to cook the meals has virtually become the norm choosing a partner of men. It is also true that many traditional families prefer to prepare foods rather than buy the processed ones because the natural ingredients are considered to be more fresh and cheaper.

Because of its utility, the convenience foods are predicted to become more far-reaching in the future. Nonetheless, it is unlikely to happen that one day people will stop enjoying home-cooked meals at least some of the time.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15393  
Aug 14, 2017   #2
Nguyen, what are you arguing about in your essay? The prompt is asking you to discuss one of two things, the extent of either your agreement or disagreement with the given topic. You were to discuss and support only one of the two opinions provided. There is no "argue" instruction in the prompt. Your whole discussion is wrong and as such, proves that you did not understand the requirements of the essay instructions. The original instruction is not asking you if you think this situation will correct itself over time. Why did you create your own prompt discussion topic?

This type of glaring error in discussion will result in an overall score of 1. Based on your TA performance, this score means that the rest of the scoring considerations need not be given a rating. That is because the rating for the other 3 remaining sections depend upon the validity and applicability of your opening statement response in relation to the TA. Failure to properly represent the task instructions means everything else in the essay no longer applies.
OP chocuatt 3 / 5  
Aug 14, 2017   #3
Thank you very much for your advice @Holt

I don't have a clear orientation when I writing an essay. What I do is just follow the sample essay on the book. I guess I have to write it again and focus on what I did wrong as you said.

I wonder if I can post my essay again on the forum after fixing.

Again, thank you very much for your help.
Mimi123 4 / 6  
Aug 15, 2017   #4
Hi Chocuatt,

I think it is an interesting topic and you have some good points to prove your opinion. For example, being able to cook well has always been one of the norm for choosing family partner is Asian countries.

However, you need to change your structure just as Holt mentioned above. I suggest you make 2-3 paragraphs to explain your opinion:
Para 1: Traditional food is fresher and healthier than convenience one => People nowadays are shifting their eating habit from convenience to nutrient.
Para 2: Traditional food plays an integral part in Asian family => Traditional meal is a culture, men tend to love women who can cook well
Para 3: You can list out advantages of fast food and state that it brings us lots of benefits as well, besides traditional food.

Good luck.


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