IELTS: Formal Letter: School renovation and volunteering

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Apr 11, 2021 #1

You have recently visited a local school in your community. It needs people who can help renovate the building and also other jobs.
Write a letter to the principal of the school and say:

- how would you be able to help
- when and why would you do it
- who will help you to do it

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this in connection with a renovation in your school that needs volunteers to help. As I recently came to your place last weekend, I would like to offer you my work free of charge.

From what I saw, it seems that the renovated building has no one to clean the floor up after the builders leaving at the end of the day, so I think I can be able to help with cleaning and pick up some garbage around the school playground. I could also help with repainting windows and doors because I have been painting my furniture for a very long time to remove mold and discoloration.

Since I am working as a full-time accountant, it would be best if I could complete the work at the weekends if that suits you. My daughter and my nieces all went through your school, so this is my pleasure to give you a hand.

My boyfriend is a builder so he would be a perfect fit for this job as well. He is highly qualified and experienced, but you already had other volunteers, we would still be grateful to give extra hands.

If you feel that my services are valuable, please contact us on the phone number below. I look forward to helping bring this incredible school back to our local neighborhoods.

Yours faithfully,

Elsa Hoang

Holt Educational Consultant - / 15461

Apr 13, 2021 #2

The letter is unclear regarding the reason for your visit to the local school. Were you there as part of a volunteer organization? Perhaps you were a graduate of the school? There needs to be a reference that will give weight to your visit which, in turn, will enlighten the reader as to why you might volunteer to help renovate the school or perform other tasks.

Having daughters and nieces who have already attended the school, meaning they already graduated. So that is not a good reason to use since there is no direct relationship between you and the school anymore. In relation to that reference, rather than saying your "boyfriend", since you already have children, it would be better to say "my husband" or "my partner" as those are more adult and formal references to a person you have a relationship with while keeping his relation to the children vague in the letter.