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There are four steps to yield a cement, while to produce concrete, one stage only is required


Anna94 47 / 56 3  
Nov 6, 2016   #1
The diagrams show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagrams provide information about producing cement from some materials and concrete-making process from cement. Overall, there are four steps to yield cement while to produce concrete need one stage only.

First of all, prepare the equipment and materials to make cement such as, limestone, clay, heat, bags, and grinder. There are tools like crusher, mixer, rotation heater, and grinder. The process is begun with refine the limestone and clay by using crusher. It will produce limestone and clay powder. Then the powder will be mixed by mixer. Afterwards, it let into rotating heater to produce heat materials. Then the matter is crushed by grinder to yield cement. Bags are used to contain the cement.

Cement can be the main material to make concrete. Concrete-making process use other materials with certain measurements like 10 percent of water, 25 percent of sand, 15% of cement, and the high percentage of small stones named gravel as much as 50. Then they are mixed by using concrete mixer. Then, it will result some concrete. 171w

Wilyaftika23 46 / 37 1  
Nov 6, 2016   #2
The diagrams provide (the) information..

It will produce limestone and clay powder.

..with certain measurements like(such as) 10 percent of water, (...) as much as 50 (percent) . Then, it will result some concrete for construction .

overall, it is good essay ana :)

keep writing :)
debby17 8 / 20 5  
Nov 6, 2016   #3
Hi there, your writing is great but there are some corrections for you to make it better. Thanks :)

... prepare the equipments and materials

There are (several) tools like crusher,...

Afterwards, it let into rotating heater to ...
IvanMS027 43 / 56 9  
Nov 7, 2016   #4
Hi. Here are my suggestions for you.

first of all, don't forget to put the data in your thread.

... cement from some raw materials and concrete-making processprocess to make concrete from cement. Overall, there are four steps to yield cement while to produce... -> try to find the specific and significant topic for this sentence

First of all, prepare the equipment and materials should be prepared to make cement ...
There are toolsequipments like crusher, mixer, ...
... begun with refinerefining the limestone and clay ...
Afterwards, it let into the rotating heater to ...
... crushed by the grinder to yield cement. Bags are used to contain/cover the cement.

Concrete-making process uses other materials ...

Suggestions: try to find the similar meaning. for example: 25 percent of sand can be replaced to "a quarter". Try to find other form snetence such as complex sentence to increase your grammatical structure on your IELTS score.

Goodluck and Keep Spirited.


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