Freedom to dress, agree and disagree

In my opinion, the freedom to dress or wear uniforms depends on the work environment.
In a creative environment, work productivity will be improved, creativity and flexibility will be stimulated by dressing freely. Actors, singers, and artists can be stood out, increased recognition in the public by clothes, making an impression on the audience, and enhance their reputation.
Conversely, some environments require uniforms. For example, a sense of cleanliness will created by lab coats of doctor, and the neutral color scheme helps patients not lean much towards any emotion. Police officers wearing uniforms make a sense of solemnity, and if you encounter them on the street and need help, you will look at their uniform for identification to ask for their assistance. Wearing uniforms also demonstrates unity and equality for everyone, regardless of wealth or poverty, high or low status, helping people treat each other fairly.

I am not sure if you wrote this statement as a part of your English writing exercise or if you wrote this as a task 2 essay response. Either way, the logic behind your discussion is sound. It is relevant to the topic and allows the reader to assess your ability to clearly express yourself in written English. This is a good starting point for a task 2 essay draft. I am just worried though because you started off the discussion as something based on an everyday wear discussion. You suddenly shifted to a uniform discussion, which, I am unsure of in terms of relevance to the discussion topic. Were you supposed to discuss uniforms or simple and ordinary clothes? The clarity of the essay discussion and its relevance will depend upon the topic that you are responding to. Right now, I am confused by the discussion presentation because 2 different dress codes are being discussed in separate paragraphs. There is no continuity in the discussion presentation.