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IELTS writing task 1- A letter to a friend about a movie that I am planning to watch


ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 672 148  
Aug 10, 2013   #1
This is my first experience of writing an informal letter. So, please help me to improve it :)

Write a letter to your English speaking friend about a movie that you are planning to watch. Please say
- What is special about this movie?
- How is it related to your friend?
- Suggest an arrangement to see this movie together.

Dear Safdar Gholi,

How are you Safdar? Hope everything goes well with your study at the new university in Melbourne. Last night that I was talking to you I found that you feel too lonely in this city as you are a new student and you may have no intimate friend here. Thus, I thought to myself if you join my friends and me tomorrow evening for watching a movie that would be a good opportunity for you to find new friends and have some fun with us.

The movie that we are going to watch tomorrow is "The World War Z". The genre of this movie is action and as much as I know you, these types of movies are in your interest. This movie is a 3D film with the staring Brad Pitt, my favourite actor. I bet we will spend great time together at the cinema.

The move is going to be screened in a Hoyts cinema, located next to the Flinders train station at 7:00 pm. I think the location of the cinema is fine for all of us since we all live in the city. My friends and I planned to meet each other at the Flinders station at 6:30 pm and we will be happy if you could join us. If the location and the time are not appropriate for you, we can change it.

I am looking forward to hearing your positive reply via email or phone.
All the best,
Ahmad
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Aug 11, 2013   #2
Dear Safdar Gholi,

.... Dear Safdar ....This is an informal letter and therefore you need to adopt a friendly tone. We generally don't call our friends in their full name. So, first name would do for this purpose.

How are you Safdar ?

... Don't repeat the name. Also, better you say something like;
Hope everything is well with you.

Last night that I was talking to you I found that you feel too lonely in this city as you are a new student and you may have no intimate friend here.

.... In reality, we don't send letters to people with whom we talk too often. So, the "last night" part sound inappropriate in this context. Open an informal letter with a general, friendly paragraph to show that you care about the friendship. For example;

How is your family doing? We haven't met each other since last summer and I really looking forward to meeting you in my next vacation.
OP ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 672 148  
Aug 11, 2013   #3
our friends in their full name

Hey, actually this is not a full name. This is a very funny Persian given name :)))))))

Thank you for the useful comments Dumi :)


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