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IELTS Letter - Write to a friend inviting him/her to watch a movie



rims 6 / 10  
Jun 2, 2014   #1
Hi All,

Can you please review this letter for me?

Write a letter to a friend inviting him/her to watch a movie that he/she wanted to see. Tell him/her
What movie is it?
Why do you think it might be interesting?
Make arrangements to watch it together.


Dear Rosy,

Hope this letter finds you in good health. I am so excited to inform you about my plan of watching a movie together. Let me give you some details of the movie so that you can also understand why I am so enthusiastic about it.

The name of the film is "The Return of the King" which is the third film of the epic fantasy adventure series directed by Peter Jackson. Besides the exciting story line, the most appealing fact of the movie is that many scenes have been captured in New Zealand and being kiwis, both of us will definitely enjoy the mesmerizing scenic beauty of our country. While viewing the trailer, I could even identify some of the places which are very near to our hometown.

I advise you not to worry about the tickets. As a member of MovieBuzz, I will get online tickets at discounted price. Let me know if the Friday 7 pm show at George Street, suits you. I am happy to pick you up from your office and drop you at your home after the show.

Hope to hear from you soon.

Your friend,
Rims

a35817126as 1 / 4  
Jun 2, 2014   #2
Dude, It's perfect. :) But why you need to take Ielts Test?... Are you not a native english speaker?
dumi 1 / 6824  
Jun 4, 2014   #3
... Between the first and the second sentences, it is better if you established a link;
Hope this letter finds you in good health. It's been such a long time that we have met last and I thought we should meet up again soon. I have a good idea to make it happen and I feel it is great if we could watch a movie together. So, I invite you to join me for the movie , "????" (name of the movie) on ???????? (date and other details)
Est2k 5 / 9  
Jun 4, 2014   #4
I find no errors in here other than the ones edited. Nice one dude. This is a good start for a step-up relationship from 'friends' :)


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