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Friendships that take place online are not as meaningful as those where people meet each other face



hoainhu 1 / -  
Jun 25, 2024   #1
In today's society, there are numerous topics causing debate among people, more especially the question of what is the value of online and offline frienships. Some people suppose that frienships through social platfforms are more valuable compared to face-to-face interactions. From my point of view, I completely agree with this idea and this essay will show the practical reasons.
To begin with, real-life friends are extremely valuable because they are easier to trust than online friends. When making friends by social network, users have less awareness of people's intentions. Additionally, they have no in-person oppoturnities to have a deep understanding to each other. As a result, online friendships may involve the risk of personal information disclosue if not careful about privacy settings. For example, the risk of losing proverty including private data and money increases beacuse people acccess to the strange links sent by online friends.
Other crucial reason is the connection of direct meetings can creat more memorable moments compared to internet communication. In terms of offline relationships, they are capable of connecting directly which is one of the key factor to build good realationships. For example, they can engage in many sharred activities such as watching movies, shopping or going to the coffee and so on. Therefore, people can share their own thoughts and feelings which is contribute to a meaningful friendships.
To sum up, It is widely acknowledged that friendships formed online lack the depth and significance of those cultivated through personal acounters. However, I believe tthat it can be highly convenient to use social media to make new friends.

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Jun 25, 2024   #2
Your prompt restatement went somewhat off topic. You tried to dramatize the paragraph by over emphasizing topics, which should not have been the case since the focus of the discussion should have been on the prompt topic alone. You misled the readers for a bit back there so you will receive penalties for the section that was exaggerated and not on topic.

Use the correct 4 paragraph format next time. Do not forget to hit the Enter key when you start a new paragraph so that there will be proper spacing between paragraphs. Right now, your presentation is too compressed and does not allow the reader to easily read the material you have presented. While your discussion is simple but effective, the problem with the restatement and incorrect formatting on the page will result in task accuracy deductions. It will lower the final score of the essay. Do not worry though, you did a good job of explaining your supporting views.
markzily - / 8  
Jun 27, 2024   #3
It's an interesting perspective on the value of friendships in today's digital age. While online friendships offer convenience and accessibility, I agree that face-to-face interactions often provide a deeper level of trust and understanding. Direct meetings allow for shared experiences and meaningful connections that can strengthen relationships in ways that online communication might not fully achieve. Balancing the benefits of both online and offline friendships can indeed enrich our social lives.


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