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"The function of science is to reassure; the purpose of art is to upset. Therein lies


irs055 4 / 8  
May 18, 2011   #1
"The function of science is to reassure; the purpose of art is to upset. Therein lies the value of each."

The relation between science and art is diverging in recent times.The natural proclivity towards science is the primary reason for the domination of science over art.

Generally the approach towards science is a common phenomena and as is inspired from generations.The purpose of science can meet a concrete and a firm reasoning towards the general accepted belief.It can reassure the facts and objectives necessary for the sustainablity of knowledge and passing it over to generations.The significance of art is limited in the case of its negligible recepients and the awareness of art in common people .Some arts and the concerned works becomes esoteric ,Primarly to meet the ideologies of some preeminent persons.Art has got an unique charracterisation of ideas and the preference to art is limitted to certain people.

The general approach to find a solution is to understand the theoretical and practical aspects of a subject .This can be only possible in considering a science as an option.Numerous reserach in the field of medical geographical ,political and economical is the clear evidence science being preferred for the sustenance and better living for tomorrow.The science subjects dwell deep into the subjects ,find the relevant facts ,work on it,cogitate new solutions and observations primarily to help the humankind to save and preserve the earth as safe place to live.

The domination of science over arts is seen at the primary level in schools and colleges .Parents prefer their children to opt science subjects than over arts in choosing their careers .It's because the natural tendency that profile bearing a science can offer them fair earning and descent life for future .This trend is growing in countries like India where the number of intake is less in case of applicants .The graduates confer high demanding job once they emerge from their respective colleges.The growing opportunities in science have a reassuring effect in case of these profesionals .The inter-relations between countries and technology transfer,and global approach of countries to provide a unified approach makes assure them a brightness in future.

The purpose of art is said to upset because of its comparision towards science yield an unnatural response.The general trend toward art is in its complexity and its implied agenda can be only understood by a few intellectuals followed by followers.The employ opportunities for art candidates is not attractive and lucrative compared to science graduates.Recent methologies are trying to make art a more attractive and preferable .During economic depression the trend is likely to made a shift in choosing a lucrative carrier over inherent choice and talent of a particular candidates.

The value of art is clear from its contribution towards the devolepment of creating a human beings more humble and generous.The works from history teaches humankind to be a better social animal .The impact on revoulutions and the emergence of artist,politicians and ideoligies made us to learn from the past incidents.

Lastly,Science and art are sides of a coin.It has got negetive and positve implications on coming to the practical side and it has to be in balance for a well functioning of our world.
mywill 4 / 10  
May 18, 2011   #2
- Your cohesion is not well performed. You know, there were words: firstly, secondly,... then how come lastly? You should start each of your main points in each passage like you do is ok, but there should be a link between them.

- This kind of writing needs more than we think, I suggest you write a balanced essay about this kind of topic, which can be highly regarded.

- You should sum up after "lastly" passage, state your own idea, do you approve or turn down?

That is all advice. I hope these can help you do better.
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OP irs055 4 / 8  
May 18, 2011   #3
Tanx dude...how about the points i claimed in my essay?/?
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
May 20, 2011   #4
I think the points you make are great. You also seem to have great understanding of English grammar.

A few places are unclear, though:

The purpose of art is said to upset because of its comparision towards science yield an unnatural response express this in a simpler way. What do you mean? I think you are saying that science appeals to everyone whereas art only appeals to people who like that art form.

Do not capitalize in a situation like this:
Lastly,Science science and art are two sides of a coin.

It has got negetive and positve implications on coming to the practical side and it has to be in balance for a well functioning of our world. This sentence has to be simplified, too.

I think your ideas are great. Science is more pragmatic than art. :-)

(Still, I wonder if it is possible for someone to live without some kind of art in his life.)
panmit 3 / 5  
May 21, 2011   #5
Wow, the moderators of this website are geniuses...I salute you.
Notoman 20 / 419  
May 22, 2011   #6
I'll tackle a few issues that jump out at me.

a firm reasoning towards the general accepted belief

When you say "the general accepted belief," it sounds like you are talking about only one generally accepted belief without stating what that belief is. Do you mean generally accepted beliefs?

Art has got an unique charracterisation of ideas and the preference to art is limitted to certain people.

Omit "got" from this sentence. Watch your spelling ... characterization and limited

geographical ,political and economical is the clear evidence

Geographical, political, and economical are all adjectives and they need a noun with them. Geographical, political, and economical what? Studies? Sciences?

primarily to help the humankind

Articles are *very* difficult in English! In this particular case, you don't need one. Omit the word "the."

descent life for future

You want "decent" here instead of descent.

makes assure them a brightness in future.

assures them a bright future

The employ opportunities for art candidates

employment

The works from history teaches

Historical works teach

ideoligies

ideologies
OP irs055 4 / 8  
May 22, 2011   #7
Thanx,,,Were the points relevant ?
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
May 23, 2011   #8
I think so, friend! It is a reasonable argument to make, and you made it well! Yet, just a month or two ago I was walking down the street and I had a thought about the writing I was going to do later that day. It made me realize fully that if I had to give up artistic expression or practical knowledge I would need to give up the practical knowledge. Practical knowledge is useless without art. In fact, I think I am going to go write something right now! :-)


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