"My future job" - revise an essay; I allways want to be a designer

Hi all,
I'm Vietnamese and i have some problem with writting an essay.I don't know how to write an essay and my vocabulary is bad.

Can you help me, please?
I need some essay at topic:family,your dream,environment,education and others.I have an essay ,please find the error in the essays and revise for their?Okie?

My future job

I allways want to be a designer.When i was small,i've dreamed about limelight,the fashon show and beautiful models who wear nice dresses or clothes-the suit was designed by me.I love drawwing or things relate to art.My father is a teacher but in the pass,he was a painter.He draw very well and i love his pictures.So that,I have the ability to draw very nice.I have a creative mind and i also enjoy the creative.I allways want to creat something of mind.And i know that something is the clothes.I love fashion and my favourite television is FASHON TV.It's a interesting chanel!!

Being a designer is not easy but i'll try my best.I hope i'll because i believe in my ability!

First, space your punctuation properly. See just about any other post on these forums to see how to do that. Then, think of a narrative incident, something from your experience, that you can use to show, rather than tell, your love of fashion. Then repost.

Hi,

I'm Vietnamese, too. There are some errors in your paragraph (can't say it's an essay). I think you should define the purpose of your essay, re-organize it, then re-write it.

Here are errors:

1. fashon show , fashion show

2. drawwing , drawing

3. End a sentence with a dot and start a new one with a space. Eg: ...be a designer.When i was ... , ...designer. When ...

4. allways , always

5. creat , create

6. my favourite television , my favourite television show

Still more ...

I think you should read more newspapers in English to improve your vocabulary & read some writing books to know how to organize an essay.

Hope this help,

Tuan.

hi, that is great that 3 vietnamese met on this topic. i obsolutely agree with mr tuan that this is not an essay, it seems like a paragraph.

Also, there is no excuse for making really obvious spelling mistakes. Run your work through a spellchecker, which will at least fix errors such as "fashon" and "allways."