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TOEFL; Gender differences and how they apply on jobs they do?



sepideh_dodaran 2 / 4  
Aug 9, 2013   #1
Men and women are different in terms of charateristics and abilities . For this reason , some jobs are done by men and others by women

When I was younger, I was a real feminist, and this feministic view didn't let me to think of the differences between two genders properly. The time I faced these differences was when I finished my bachelor's degree. I was really disappointed because I had forgotten the importance of the social belief about a subject even more than the individual's idea. In my opinion, beside the differences between the characteristics of a man and a woman, culture is significant and mostly forgotten issue that defines the women's social life.

On one hand, I think if we think of a woman as an individual creature she would be able to take part in the same social activities that a man can does . A group of the people think you should not think of a woman as a weak creature that always need men's assist to continue hey way in her life. opposing with that group of people, I chose mechanical engineering which was, according to their idea, a proper major for the boys. In order to show their idea doesn't make sense in this modern era, I tried hard to be a successful engineer.

On the other hand, being frank , I change my mind in some ways. Because first of all, even becoming a very skillful engineer, I was considered a woman in the society and this would not change the social belief of a naive creature about me. Now I admit that I am not able to do hard stuff as a man in my situation would be able. What I mean is rather mentally than phisically. After marriage I understand that women need more peace in their life than the success that would make her husband jealous and would threaten her marital life. No matter how powerful woman you are, you always need to be supported emotionally from your husband and as far as you look more powerful than him, you would not receive the attention you were looking for. In my oppinion a woman can not be both a successful wife and worker.

Now I think, although I am a skillful and well-educated engineer, but there are some jobs that although I think I would do properly but I would not take. I need to find a job that would be more suitable for my major, my characteristics and my society's general belief. May be you would think of me as an old-minded woman, but I am speaking about the reality of living in a developing country about living situation. I do not ignore the women's ability to do their jobs properly, I am speaking the situation that is not in their hands. In order to change your society you should sacrifice your life, and I was not so much strong.

dumi 1 / 6793  
Aug 9, 2013   #2
Well ... you are preparing for TOEFL independent writing task which requires you to write an essay with certain features in its content within a stipulated time frame. Your introduction fails to produce those feature and your whole essay too. You need to have a sound alignment with your prompt and it should be displayed throughout your writing.


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